Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The Pie chart and bar graph illustrates data regarding young individuals who are attending different dance classes on locations of school halls, private studios, and community halls and others.

Overall, private studios have largest proportions of young people attending dance classes, followed by, school hall location and community halls and others. Mahority of participants Under 11, attend Ballet dance and tap dance classes classes as compared to the partcipants of age group between 11 to 16. Modern dance classes were attended by participants of age over 11 years.

Private studios made up largest proportions of dance classes, accounting for 48%. School halls and community halls recorded figures of 24% and 18% respectively. However, college based studios had smallest proportion of dance classes, accounted for 10%.

Ballet dance classes was mostly attended by 600 participants of under 11 age group as compared to 300 participants of 11 to 16 age group. Conversely, Modern classes were mainly attended by more than 500 of 11-16 age group as compared to 300 participants of age group of under 11. In addition, tap dance was also second highest class attended by under 11 age group.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts, including the distribution of locations and the age-related trends in dance styles. You provided clear comparisons, such as contrasting the popularity of ballet among younger children with modern dance among the older age group. However, the report could be improved by ensuring all data points are accurately described; for instance, you mentioned 'college based studios' which were not explicitly labeled as such in the prompt, and there are minor inaccuracies in the interpretation of the data figures. To reach a higher band, ensure that your overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends rather than just listing data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on specific data sets. You use some cohesive devices like 'Conversely' and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and some mechanical transitions. For example, the second paragraph starts with 'Overall,' but the subsequent sentences feel like a list of facts rather than a cohesive analysis. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the logical progression of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportions,' 'recorded figures,' and 'conversely.' However, there are several spelling errors ('Mahority,' 'partcipants') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'dance classes classes.' The vocabulary is generally functional but lacks the precision and variety required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensure you proofread for basic spelling mistakes, which can detract from the professional tone of an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Private studios made up largest proportions,' 'Ballet dance classes was'), missing articles ('the' before 'largest'), and punctuation errors. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they occur frequently enough to limit your score. To progress, pay closer attention to pluralization and article usage, and try to vary your sentence structure to include more error-free complex sentences.

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