Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart demonstrates the data on the location and different types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are actively attending.

Well the highest figure is 48% in private studios.on the other hand school halls, community halls and other has a moderate numbers 24% and 18% respectively. Moreover least percentage in college based studios which is only 10%.

Now according to given information the age group of people which are attending the classes between 11 to 16. Furthermore under 11 young people also participate in dance classes. In modern dance classes there are more than 800 students do practice on dance but here around 300 students are those who are under 11.

Tap class the figure of both students who are under 11 and those who are between 11 to 16 are more and less equal. They vary between 400 to 500 students.

Thirdly ballet class where we have huge diff between those students who are under 11 and those who vary between 11 to 16. Under 11 students are significantly higher than the age bracket 11 to 16.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation is somewhat disjointed. While you identify the highest and lowest percentages for locations, the description of the dance types is less precise. You mention 'more than 800' and 'around 300' for modern dance, but the data interpretation lacks a clear comparative structure. The response tends to list facts rather than synthesising the information into a coherent summary. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear overview that highlights the most significant trends rather than just reporting individual data points in isolation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. The paragraphs are not well-defined, and the transition between the location data and the dance type data is abrupt. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Furthermore', the overall flow is mechanical. The use of 'Well' at the start of a sentence is too informal for an Academic Task 1 response. To improve, use clear paragraphing—one for the location chart and one for the dance types—and use more sophisticated linking phrases to connect your comparisons, such as 'In contrast to' or 'Conversely'.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the basic information, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. Phrases like 'moderate numbers' and 'huge diff' are imprecise and informal. You rely on basic descriptors and struggle with collocations related to data reporting. For instance, instead of 'highest figure is 48%', you could use 'private studios account for the largest proportion at 48%'. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns (e.g., 'proportion', 'segment', 'predominate') would significantly enhance your score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of the text. Examples include 'school halls, community halls and other has a moderate numbers' (subject-verb agreement and article usage) and 'the age group of people which are attending' (relative pronoun error). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and there is a lack of complex grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and practice using complex sentences with subordinate clauses to describe the data more fluently.

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