Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The presented pie chart illustrates the proportion of the dance classes at different location such as Private studios, College-based studios, School halls and Community hall& other. While the bar graph depict the information of the various types of dance classes namely Bullet, Tap and Modern by age group of under 11 as well as 11-16. The data are given as percentages and numbers.

Overall it can be seen that the highest number of proportion accounted by the people at Private studios. Conversely, the lowest type of dance selected by the under 11 age group of citizens in Modern type.

To begin with, around 48% of dance classes selected by the people was under private studios. It was the maximum number of proportion selected by the youngster. However, at the College-based studios and Community hall & other areas of classes were choose by the youth at 10% and 18% respectively. Moreover, 24% of the person selected School hall location.

Moving to the rest of the information, under the age of 11, Ballet type of dance was choose the most of the students. It was approximately 600. Whereas, only 300 pupils were interested in the Modern dance. Moreover, more then 500 students under 11-16 age group selected the Modern dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts and provided relevant comparisons. You covered the location data and the age-group breakdown for dance types. However, there are some inaccuracies in data reporting; for instance, you state 'around 48%' for private studios, but the chart shows 48%. While you mention the age groups, your description of the bar chart is slightly disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends rather than just listing features. The response is well-structured, but more precise data handling would improve the overall quality.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Moving to the rest of the information' to guide the reader. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly forced. Referencing is generally clear, but the connection between the two charts could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately, and the progression of ideas is easy to follow, though the internal structure of the paragraphs could be more sophisticated to achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'illustrates', and 'accounted for'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'Bullet' instead of 'Ballet', 'choose' instead of 'chosen', and 'the highest number of proportion'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on using more varied and accurate collocations and ensure that you are using the correct forms of words (e.g., nouns vs. verbs).

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'the highest number of proportion accounted by the people' (passive voice error), 'the lowest type of dance selected... in Modern type' (preposition error), and 'more then' instead of 'more than'. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are persistent. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct verb forms (e.g., 'was chosen' instead of 'was choose'), and consistent use of articles. Increasing the accuracy of your complex sentences will help you move into a higher band.

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