Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart illustrates the data on the location of dance classes, while Bar chart compares the information about categories of dance classes that young people attend currently in a town in Australia.
Overall, it can be seen that private studios accounted for the highest proportion. Whereas college-based studios experienced the lowest percentage. Meanwhile, Ballet dance is very popular in children age under 11, while children from 11-16 likes Modern dance more.
Private studios is very popular location for dance classes, accounted for 48% of percentage as compare to school halls after school, that is 24%. In contrast, college-based studios is the least favorable location with 10% and community halls and other comprised 18%.
Moreover, at age under 11, Ballet dance is preferred by most of the people, 600 students choose this, as compare to tap and modern type of dance, almost 450 students enrolled in tap dance classes and 300 students of modern dance class. In contrast, in group age from 11-16, ballet dance is the least popular choice with 300 students, and modern dance classes was highly popular in the same group with almost 520 students. At last, 500 students preferred Tap dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie and bar charts. You successfully highlight the most popular and least popular locations and compare the dance preferences across the two age groups. However, the analysis is slightly mechanical, and some data points could be more accurately described. For instance, stating '48% of percentage' is redundant and slightly confusing. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are more analytical rather than just listing figures. The overview is present but could be more integrated to better highlight the key trends across the entire dataset.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two charts. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'In contrast', and 'Meanwhile' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and some mechanical transitions. For example, the transition 'At last' is not the most natural way to conclude a paragraph in this context. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that referencing (e.g., 'the same group') is consistently clear would enhance the overall cohesion of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'enrolled'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. Phrases like '48% of percentage' and 'group age from 11-16' are slightly unnatural. Additionally, there is some repetition of basic verbs like 'choose' and 'preferred'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'predominate', 'constitute', or 'a significant majority', and ensure that your collocations are idiomatic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors that persist. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'Private studios is' (should be 'are') and 'modern dance classes was' (should be 'were'). There are also minor punctuation and article errors, such as 'Bar chart' (needs 'The') and 'children age under 11' (should be 'children aged under 11'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and article usage.
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