Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts illustrate the data and what type of young pupils in Australia were attending dance classes.
Overall, the percentage of private students were the most popular, while the college based studios were the least famous among the young youth.
The percentage of students who loved private studios were 48% in Australia. Additionally, the percentage of school halls were the most well-liked of 24% in Australia. In contrast, the percentage of college based studios were recorded as the least of around 10%. The popularity of community halls other than of school halls, college base and private studios were 18%.
There were three types of dance classes namely as ballet, tap, and modern. The highest number of students of under 11 were liked ballet classes, However; 450 number of students liked tap classes, while approximately 510 students those who were above 11 liked modern dance classes instead of above 11 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is inconsistent. While you identify the most and least popular locations, the description of the dance types is confusing. For example, the statement '450 number of students liked tap classes' lacks context regarding age groups, and the comparison 'while approximately 510 students those who were above 11 liked modern dance classes instead of above 11 students' is grammatically garbled and fails to clearly convey the data. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are accurately linked to their respective categories and that comparisons are logically structured rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'In contrast' and 'Additionally' are used, but the internal structure of the sentences often makes the flow difficult to follow. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the comparison between age groups becomes muddled. Improving the transition between sentences and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat repetitive and occasionally imprecise. You use 'percentage' repeatedly when referring to raw data or proportions, and terms like 'most famous' or 'loved' are not appropriate for describing statistical data in an academic report. Words like 'well-liked' and 'young youth' are also stylistically weak or redundant. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary such as 'prevalent', 'proportion', 'accounted for', or 'the majority'. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns will help you describe the data more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'the percentage of private students were' and 'the percentage of school halls were'. Punctuation is also problematic, notably the misuse of the semicolon in 'However; 450 number'. The sentence structure in the final paragraph is particularly fragmented, making it difficult to understand the intended comparison. You should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and avoiding overly complex sentence structures until you can control them without error.
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