Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the propositions of different types of dance classes are joining young people in a town in Australia .
Overall, young people are showing more interest to join private studios and less people are attending the college based studio. Different traits of dance classes students join , Whereas under 11 age group student join in Ballet group with a maximum number. While same age group student join Modern dance class with less numbers.
In detail, private studio has occupy the maximum record with 48% . While in school halls after school dance classes are reduce the perform to 24%. In community halls and other location of dance classes record the 18%, Which is also decline the number. In lowest, dance class held on college based studios which is 10% .
In different types of dance classes join by different age group. In Ballet the highest number of students join by under 11 age group with 600 students. While it decline in age group of 11 to 16, half of the student attend .
In Tap dance classes under 11 students join with nearly 500 ,however it slightly decrease to just above 400 students join by 11 to 16 age group.
In Modern dance classes just 300 students join those are under 11, While above 500 student other age group are climb significantly in the class.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including locations and dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, cohesive overview. While the data is generally accurate, the description of the trends is occasionally confusing, such as the phrase 'are reduce the perform to 24%'. The report identifies the highest and lowest categories but fails to provide a truly integrated comparison between the two charts. To reach a higher band, you should focus on grouping data more logically and ensuring that the overview highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing statistics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often awkward or incorrect, such as 'In detail' and 'In lowest'. The transitions between sentences are frequently disjointed, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, making the flow feel mechanical. For example, the sentence 'Different traits of dance classes students join , Whereas under 11 age group...' lacks a clear logical connection to the preceding paragraph. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the readability and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede clarity. Phrases like 'propositions of different types' (likely meaning 'proportions') and 'has occupy the maximum record' are non-standard. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on repetitive structures to describe data. To improve, you should focus on using more precise terminology for describing trends, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'represent', and ensure that word forms (nouns vs. verbs) are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('are join', 'is decline'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction. For instance, 'In different types of dance classes join by different age group' is grammatically incorrect and difficult to parse. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence structure prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.
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