Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

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Writing

The charts illustrules information of types of currently attending dance classes by young people in a town in Australia.

Overall, it can be seen that, the large percentage of the people use private studios for dance classes and only few percentag of people attending collage-based studios while in Bullet and Tap dance classes, people under the 11 are attending Bullet and Tap types to more than modern however 11 to 16 agers use modern type.

To begin with, of the people use private studios for dance classes, 24% of people use school halls after school while only 18% of public use community halls & other locations whereas, just 10% of people choose collage-based studios for dancing.

Further more, there are three different type of classes. by age group, people under 11 are highly use Ballet by 600 students 450 students of under 11 are choose tap and only 300 of students use modern classes for dancing moreover in age group 11 to 16, 300 students we bullet, 410 students choose tap and 520 students choose

modern classes, so the level of 11 to 16 are half than under 11 in bullet in tup there is small difference and in modern 11-16 age group we use more

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the charts, including location and dance types. However, the presentation of data is inconsistent and at times confusing. For instance, the mention of '600 students' for Ballet is not clearly supported by the visual data provided, and the comparison between age groups is somewhat muddled. While the response attempts to report the main features, the lack of clarity in data interpretation and the incomplete sentence at the end ('520 students choose modern classes, so the level of 11 to 16 are half than under 11') hinder the overall task achievement. To improve, ensure that data points are accurately extracted and clearly linked to the categories described.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow of ideas is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. While cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Further more' are used, they are often followed by sentences that lack logical progression or clear referencing. The connection between the location data and the dance type data is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, often resulting in a list-like presentation of data rather than a coherent analysis.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'illustrules' instead of 'illustrates', 'collage-based' instead of 'college-based', and 'bullet' instead of 'ballet'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. There is a reliance on basic terms, and the misuse of words like 'agers' and 'highly use' indicates a lack of control over word choice and collocation. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', and 'predominant'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the large percentage of the people use'), incorrect preposition usage, and sentence fragments. Complex structures are attempted but are often faulty, such as 'the level of 11 to 16 are half than under 11'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and run-on sentences. The majority of the sentences contain errors, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.

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