Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and bar graph depicts the information about the location of dance classes and types of dance classes.
Overall it can be seen from the pie chart folks prefer private studio maximum for dance class. While people choose college studio least. Whereas in bar graph under 11 students are maximum for two types while in modern dance classes students of age 11 to 16 prefer it more.
According to pie chart, maximum number of folks prefer private studio for dance classes which is 48%. The second highest is School halls which is 24% followed by community halls and other which is 18%.The least among all choose by individuals is college- based studios which is only 10%.
According to bar graph , the maximum Students in ballet classes are under 11 which is approximately 600.
While the students of age 11-16 are near about 300.
In tap classes the students under 11are about 450. Whereas the students of age 11 to 16 are approximately 410 who are interested in this class .
Moreover, in modern classes students of age 11 -16 are more interested which is about 500. In addition the students of age under 11 are least which is only 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. You have successfully selected key data points, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related trends in dance styles. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While you mention 'maximum' and 'least', the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. To reach a higher band, ensure you make more direct comparisons between the categories rather than listing figures sequentially. The summary is present but could be more integrated into the body paragraphs to provide a more professional report structure.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'According to pie chart' and 'According to bar graph' are used repeatedly, which makes the flow feel stilted. There is a lack of varied linking words to connect ideas within and between sentences. While the progression of ideas is logical, the transitions between the different data sets could be smoother. Improving the variety of cohesive devices, such as using 'In contrast', 'Conversely', or 'Furthermore', would significantly enhance the readability and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks range and sophistication. You rely heavily on basic terms like 'maximum', 'least', and 'folks'. The use of 'folks' is too informal for an Academic Task 1 report, which requires a formal tone. There are also some minor issues with word choice, such as 'choose by individuals', which is slightly awkward. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'account for', 'proportion', or 'significant trend'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repetitive phrasing and demonstrate a better command of the language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'The pie chart and bar graph depicts' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'the maximum Students' (incorrect capitalization). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods in some instances. The range of structures is limited, and there is a lack of complex sentence variety. To achieve a higher score, focus on correcting basic subject-verb agreement issues and aim to use a wider variety of complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses or participial phrases, while ensuring they remain error-free.
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