Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The data presents the the location and kinds of dances of teenagers performed in Australian town.
Overall,the bar chart shows four parts of locations and highest is private studio and college base studio is less in use and also chart gives information about the types of dances and in large numbers of students is in ballet and smallest is in tap.
The first is location of dance classes and in which private studio is mostly used and it is at 48% and the school hall contain 24% and it is less then private.
The community hall held 18% children and it a bit low than school studio.
The college base studio is very low in use and it is only 10%.
The first dance class is ballet and 600 students attend it that are 11 to 16 years old and only 300 those are under 11. The second type is tap dance and this dance is identical in attendance and both ages students are around 400 and the last is modern and in which 11 to 16 years old students are 520 and under 11 are 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both charts. You successfully highlighted the most popular location (private studio) and the most popular dance type (ballet). However, the report lacks a clear, analytical overview. While you mention some data points, the comparison between the two age groups in the second chart is slightly confusing. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a more cohesive summary of the trends rather than just listing percentages. The information is generally accurate, but the lack of a clear synthesis of the data prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'The first is...', 'The second type is...'). There are also issues with referencing; for instance, 'it a bit low than school studio' lacks a clear subject. The flow between sentences is somewhat disjointed, and the transition between the two charts could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple descriptors like 'mostly used', 'very low', and 'small'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'college base studio' instead of 'college-based studio' and 'kinds of dances of teenagers performed'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'account for', 'a significant proportion', or 'marginal'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will allow you to describe the charts with more sophistication and precision.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the the location', 'school hall contain 24%', and 'it a bit low than school studio'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors is noticeable. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of comparative structures (e.g., 'lower than' instead of 'low than').
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