Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
𝑇ℎ𝑒 𝑐ℎ𝑎𝑟𝑡 𝑖𝑙𝑙𝑢𝑠𝑡𝑟𝑎𝑡𝑒𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑜𝑐𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒𝑠 𝑜𝑓 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝑐𝑙𝑎𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠 𝑦𝑜𝑢𝑛𝑔 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑐𝑢𝑟𝑟𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑙𝑦 𝑎𝑟𝑒 𝑎𝑡𝑡𝑒𝑛𝑑𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑖𝑛 𝐴𝑢𝑠𝑡𝑟𝑎𝑙𝑖𝑎.
𝑂𝑣𝑒𝑟𝑎𝑙𝑙, 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 𝑢𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑙𝑜𝑐𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛 𝑓𝑟𝑜𝑚 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒𝑠 𝑖𝑠 𝑝𝑟𝑖𝑣𝑎𝑡𝑒 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑖𝑜𝑠 ℎ𝑜𝑙𝑑𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑎 48% 𝑜𝑣𝑒𝑟 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑜𝑡ℎ𝑒𝑟 𝑙𝑜𝑐𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛𝑠. 𝑊ℎ𝑒𝑟𝑒 𝑎𝑠 𝑐𝑜𝑚𝑚𝑢𝑛𝑖𝑡𝑦 ℎ𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑜𝑡ℎ𝑒𝑟 𝑎𝑟𝑒 𝑡ℎ𝑒 2𝑛𝑑 𝑙𝑎𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑖𝑐𝑒 𝑖𝑠 𝑓𝑜𝑟 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑎𝑐𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑜𝑛 18%. 𝑊ℎ𝑖𝑙𝑒 𝑐𝑜𝑙𝑙𝑒𝑔𝑒 𝑏𝑎𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑖𝑜𝑠 𝑎𝑟𝑒 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑛 𝑙𝑜𝑐𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛𝑠 𝑏𝑦 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑗𝑢𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑏𝑦 10% 𝑜𝑓 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒. 𝐵𝑢𝑡 𝑜𝑛𝑒 𝑞𝑢𝑎𝑟𝑡𝑒𝑟 𝑜𝑓 𝑐ℎ𝑎𝑟𝑡 ℎ𝑜𝑙𝑑𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑏𝑦 𝑠𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑙 ℎ𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑠 (𝑎𝑓𝑡𝑒𝑟 𝑠𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑙) 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑏𝑦 24% 𝑜𝑓 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒.
𝐶𝑜𝑚𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑡𝑜 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒𝑠 𝑜𝑓 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝑐𝑙𝑎𝑠𝑠𝑒𝑠 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑏𝑦 𝑔𝑟𝑜𝑢𝑝 𝑜𝑓 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑢𝑛𝑑𝑒𝑟 11 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑏𝑒𝑡𝑤𝑒𝑒𝑛 11-16 𝑎𝑔𝑒 𝑔𝑟𝑜𝑢𝑝, 𝑏𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑒 𝑖𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒 𝑜𝑓 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑏𝑦 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑣𝑒 11, 𝑤ℎ𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑎𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑢𝑛𝑑𝑒𝑟 11𝑎𝑟𝑒 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑛 𝑓𝑜𝑟 𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑢𝑡 300 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑜𝑛𝑙𝑦. 𝑊ℎ𝑖𝑙𝑒 𝑡𝑎𝑝 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑚𝑜𝑑𝑒𝑟𝑛 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝐼𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 ℎ𝑖𝑔ℎ 𝑛𝑢𝑚𝑏𝑒𝑟 𝑜𝑓 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑢𝑛𝑑𝑒𝑟 11 𝑏𝑢𝑡, 𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑣𝑒 11 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑏𝑒𝑖𝑛𝑔 𝑙𝑒𝑠𝑠 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑓𝑜𝑟 𝑖𝑡.
𝑇𝑜 𝑠𝑢𝑚 𝑢𝑝 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑠 𝑙𝑜𝑐𝑎𝑡𝑖𝑜𝑛 𝑏𝑦 𝑦𝑜𝑢𝑛𝑔 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑖𝑠 𝑝𝑟𝑖𝑣𝑎𝑡𝑒 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑖𝑜𝑠 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑡 𝑜𝑛𝑒 𝑐𝑜𝑙𝑙𝑎𝑔𝑒 𝑏𝑎𝑠𝑒𝑑 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑖𝑜𝑠. 𝑊ℎ𝑒𝑟𝑒𝑎𝑠 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 ℎ𝑖𝑔ℎ𝑒𝑟 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒 𝑜𝑓 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒 𝑖𝑠 𝑏𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑒𝑡 𝑖𝑛 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑔𝑟𝑜𝑢𝑝 𝑜𝑓 𝑠𝑡𝑢𝑑𝑒𝑛𝑡𝑠 𝑎𝑏𝑜𝑣𝑒 11 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑒𝑎𝑠𝑡 𝑖𝑠 𝑚𝑜𝑑𝑒𝑟𝑛 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒. 𝐹𝑜𝑟 𝑔𝑟𝑜𝑢𝑝 𝑜𝑓 𝑢𝑛𝑑𝑒𝑟 11 𝑦𝑜𝑢𝑛𝑔 𝑝𝑒𝑜𝑝𝑙𝑒 𝑚𝑜𝑠𝑡 𝑐ℎ𝑜𝑜𝑠𝑒𝑛 𝑡𝑦𝑝𝑒 𝑖𝑠 𝑚𝑜𝑑𝑒𝑟𝑛 𝑠𝑡𝑦𝑙𝑒 𝑎𝑛𝑑 𝑡ℎ𝑒 𝑙𝑜𝑤𝑒𝑠𝑡 𝑏𝑎𝑙𝑙𝑒𝑡 𝑑𝑎𝑛𝑐𝑒.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the location preferences and the age-related dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. For instance, the description of the dance types is confusing, particularly the reference to '300 students' which is not clearly supported by the provided data. While the overall trends are identified, the comparison between the two age groups is muddled, and the summary section repeats information rather than synthesising it effectively. The response addresses the prompt but lacks the clarity and precision required for a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'Coming to the types of dance classes' and the repetitive use of 'whereas' and 'while'. The logical progression is frequently interrupted by unclear phrasing, particularly in the second paragraph where the relationship between the age groups and the dance types is difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present but the internal flow within paragraphs is disjointed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'most chosen' or 'least chosen'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'most used location from dances' and 'most high number'. Spelling errors, such as 'balle' for 'ballet' and 'collage' for 'college', also occur. The range of vocabulary is just sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility needed to describe data trends effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but these are frequently marred by grammatical errors. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('is the most type of dance being chosen'), subject-verb agreement errors, and awkward sentence construction ('But one quarter of chart holding by school halls'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misused commas. While the meaning is generally discernible, the frequency of errors is high and occasionally forces the reader to re-read sections to understand the intended message.
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