Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
The pie chart and bar graph provide information about dance classes, specifically where they are held and the number of students of different age groups enrolled in three styles of dance. Overall, private studios are the most popular venue for dance classes. When looking at the types of classes, ballet is the top choice for younger children, while modern dance is the most popular style for teenagers. Private studios host nearly half of all dance classes at 48%. This is twice as much as school halls (after-school classes), which account for 24%. Community halls and other locations host 18% of the classes, while college-based studios are the least common venue at just 10%.Regarding student age groups, children under 11 make up the largest group in both ballet and tap dance. Around 600 students under 11 take ballet, compared to about 300 students aged 11 to 16. Tap dance shows a similar pattern, with over 400 younger children and roughly 300 older students. Modern dance is the only category where teenagers outnumber younger children, with approximately 500 students aged 11 to 16 enrolled compared to about 300 students under 11.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 7.0 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
You have successfully addressed all parts of the task by summarizing the main features of both the pie chart and the bar graph. You identified the key trends, such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for different dance styles. The comparisons are clear, particularly when contrasting the age groups for ballet and modern dance. To reach a higher band, ensure that you provide a more comprehensive overview in the introduction or summary paragraph that synthesizes the data more effectively, rather than just listing the charts' contents. Overall, the information is well-selected and accurately reported.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.5
The response is logically organized, with a clear progression from the general venue data to the specific age-related dance styles. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the two distinct data sets. You use cohesive devices such as 'Overall,' 'Regarding,' and 'while' to link ideas smoothly. The flow of information is natural, and the referencing is clear throughout the text. To improve, you could experiment with a wider variety of cohesive devices to connect sentences more fluidly, though your current usage is already quite effective and clear.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information with precision. Phrases like 'account for,' 'least common venue,' and 'shows a similar pattern' are used appropriately in an academic context. There is a good awareness of collocation, and your word choices are accurate. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated or less common lexical items to describe trends and proportions, such as 'predominant,' 'constitute,' or 'marginal,' which would add more academic flair to your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 7.0
Your writing displays a good mix of simple and complex sentence structures. The grammar is generally accurate, and your control over punctuation is solid. Most sentences are error-free, and the few minor slips do not impede communication. You successfully used comparative structures, such as 'twice as much as' and 'outnumber,' which are essential for this type of task. To aim for a higher band, try to integrate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as passive voice constructions or participle clauses, to enhance the sophistication of your sentences.
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