Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Both charts below illustrates information on how younger generation in a town in Australia attends different types of dance classes and the locations of dance classes.
Overall there are four different locations of dance class. the highest percentage of dance classes occur in private studios whereas the least amount of classes occur in college based studios. Then we have the School halls and lastly Community halls and other.
The highest amount of classes about 48 percent occurs in the Private studios .In contrast the least amount of classes about 10 percent occurs in the College based studios. Then we have the School halls where dance classes occurs after the schools have finished roughly about 24 percent. Lastly we have Community halls and other which covers the 18 percent.
In the second graph we can see Ballet classes are the most popular in the children under 11 years about 600 students and showed a moderate range of about 300 students in the age ranging from 11 to 16.On the other hand a large number of students in the age 11 to 16 prefer Modern dance and only a mid range about 300 students under11 goes for Modern dance.
Tap dance has a similar range for both ages group about 450 to 480 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, identifying key trends such as the popularity of private studios and the age-related preferences for dance styles. However, the report lacks a clear, cohesive overview that synthesizes the data effectively. While the figures are generally accurate, the description of the second chart is somewhat repetitive and lacks a more analytical approach to comparing the age groups. To improve, ensure that the 'overview' paragraph highlights the most significant differences or trends across both charts rather than just listing the categories. The response is sufficient in length and addresses all parts of the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, the frequent use of 'Then we have' and 'Lastly' makes the flow feel a bit simplistic. Paragraphing is present, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to create a more professional tone. The referencing is generally clear, but the overall structure would benefit from a more sophisticated use of linking words to connect the data points more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the range and precision required for a higher band. Phrases like 'highest amount of classes' and 'mid range' are functional but repetitive. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive adjectives. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise terminology related to data description, such as 'predominant,' 'account for,' 'a significant proportion,' or 'fluctuate.' The spelling is generally accurate, but the word choice remains quite basic throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are several grammatical errors that persist. For instance, 'Both charts below illustrates' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'dance classes occurs' (plural/singular mismatch). Additionally, there are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after periods and inconsistent capitalization. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent punctuation will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
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