Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie char and table provide the various type of information about location and dance classes of young people in a town in Australia that are currently attending.
Overall, it is clear that school halls classes accounted for largest share of participation in Australia. In contrast, the individuals join collage-based studies accounted for the smallest proportion of all four classes.
Turning to the first set of data, the private studies represent the largest proportion of participation in all these categories, approximately 48%. Regarding the categories of school halls and community halls and other stood at 24% and 18%.
Turning to the remaining data, dance classes were most popular among young children, ballet class experienced the largest sector of individuals group consist of 600 participants. Additionally, the modern class had largest proportion of adolescents, account for approximately 42% of the 500 participants. By comparison, the proportion of participants using private halls was twice as high as that of those using school halls , at 48% and 24% respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the popularity of private halls and the breakdown of dance styles by age. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state that 'school halls' accounted for the largest share, but the data indicates 'private halls' are the largest at 48%. Additionally, the description of the dance classes is confusing; you mention 'ballet class experienced the largest sector' and 'modern class had largest proportion of adolescents', but the connection between the categories and the provided figures is unclear. The summary lacks precision, which prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'Turning to', and 'In contrast' to signal transitions. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed. For example, the jump between the location data and the dance style data is abrupt. Furthermore, some referencing is unclear, such as 'the remaining data', which does not effectively link the two charts. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical rather than fluid.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several errors in word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'individuals join collage-based studies' (likely meant 'college-based') and 'largest sector of individuals group' are awkward and imprecise. You also use 'type of information' redundantly. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'proportion' and 'participants', the lack of precision in word choice limits your ability to convey information clearly. More attention to collocations and accurate terminology is needed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include missing articles ('accounted for largest share'), incorrect pluralisation ('type of information'), and awkward sentence construction ('the individuals join collage-based studies accounted for'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often marred by errors, such as 'the proportion of participants using private halls was twice as high as that of those using school halls'. These errors occasionally make the meaning difficult to follow, although they do not completely impede communication.
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