Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided pie chart illustrates the proportion of young residents who participate in various dance classes across different locations in an Australian town.
Overall, private studios and school halls accounted for the vast majority of attendees, whereas college-based studios registered the lowest share. Furthermore, private studios emerged as the most popular dance venue overall.
To begin with, private studios had the highest share of dance classes at 48% in Australia, School halls and after-school young people using as a dance classes at 24%. Young residents are attending dance classes in community halls and other, which is 18%. College-based studios had the lowest share of young residents because they are using very less this location for the dance classes at 10%
Turning to the next details, second graph shows the different types of dance classes by age group. Under 11-16 and under 11 age group. Ballet recorded the largest share of dance classes, which is 600 students are participating under 11 age bracket, However, 11-16 age group students are participating in modern dance classes over 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the highest and lowest categories, the description of the second chart is confusing. You mention 'Under 11-16 and under 11 age group' but do not clearly contrast the data for these groups. Furthermore, the data reporting is occasionally inaccurate or poorly phrased, such as 'School halls and after-school young people using as a dance classes', which makes it difficult to follow the specific figures. To improve, ensure that comparisons are made more explicitly and that data points are presented with greater clarity and precision.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or awkward. Phrases like 'To begin with' and 'Turning to the next details' are used, but the internal flow within paragraphs is hampered by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. For instance, the transition between the first and second chart is abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to determine exactly which data point is being discussed. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on basic terms like 'share', 'lowest', and 'highest'. There are also instances of awkward word choice, such as 'using very less this location', which is non-standard. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more sophisticated collocations and descriptive language to report trends and proportions. For example, instead of 'registered the lowest share', you could use 'accounted for the smallest proportion'. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'proportion' will help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'School halls and after-school young people using as a dance classes' and 'because they are using very less this location'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and ensuring that verbs and prepositions are used correctly will help improve your accuracy.
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