Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The charts below illustrates information on the location, and types of dance classes young people, in a town in australia, by age group.

Overall, it is remarkable that private studios have a huge share compared with the other location. Whereas college-based studios has the lowest number of dance classes. Furthermore, ballet classes have the largest number of youngs where they are under 11 years old. In contrast, the same classes have the lowest number of mombers where they between 11 and 16 years old.

Private studios represent the largest proprtion amoung all the location by almost half of percentage. While school halls comes second by approximate to quarter of all the percentage. Community halls and other percentage is near to the fifth. Whereas college-based studios have the small share by just 10%.

Dance classes for ballet are favour type for members under 11 years by 600 member, In opposit of that it is not likely for children in the age of 11 to 16 by just 300 child in this type of classes. Tap classes come second for the youngest groups by almost 450 member, and it is almost equivalent for the older group by approximate to 430 member. Modern classes have the lowest popularity for the youngs by just 300 member, but it is not the same thing for more than 11 years members which they more than 500 member on this type of classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of both charts, including the distribution of locations and the popularity of dance classes by age group. You made relevant comparisons, such as noting the contrast between ballet popularity in the two age groups. However, the response is slightly marred by some inaccurate reporting of the data. For instance, you mention 'almost half of percentage' for private studios, which is imprecise, and the description of 'other percentage' is vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are cited with greater precision and that the overview clearly synthesises the most significant trends rather than just listing them.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on location and class type respectively. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'In contrast', and 'While'. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Some sentences feel disjointed, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'it is not the same thing for more than 11 years members'. Improving the variety and naturalness of your linking words will help the text flow more smoothly and improve the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'proportion', 'popularity', and 'equivalent'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'youngs' instead of 'young people', 'mombers' (likely a typo for members), and 'favour type' instead of 'favoured type'. Additionally, the phrasing 'In opposit of that' is incorrect. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word forms (nouns vs. adjectives) are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, such as 'school halls comes second' and 'college-based studios has'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary commas used throughout the text, such as in 'location, and types' and 'young people, in a town'. While these errors rarely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical agreement and reducing unnecessary punctuation to improve the clarity of your writing.

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