Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts Provide information about the locations and types of dance classes currently attended by young people in Australia ,with the data divided into different age groups .
overall, private studios are by far the most common location for dance classes, whereas college based studios are the least frequently used location for dance class .In terms of dance styles ballet is the most popular among the children under age 11.while modern dance is considerably more popular among those aged 11-16.participants in tap classes relatively smaller between two age groups.
Regarding the location of dance classes .private studios accounts for 48% of all classes.which twice the propertion held in school halls (24%).
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully develop the response. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete. You have not provided a comprehensive overview of all data points, such as the specific percentages for all dance styles or the remaining location categories. The summary is too brief to adequately cover all parts of the task, leading to an under-developed response that lacks the necessary detail for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the structure is fragmented. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as the abrupt transition 'Regarding the location of dance classes'. The paragraphing is inconsistent, with some sentences standing alone as single-sentence paragraphs. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas flow logically from one to the next using a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your observations.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic descriptors like 'most common' and 'least frequently used'. There are also some errors in word choice and form, such as 'propertion' (spelling) and 'accounts' (subject-verb agreement). To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description, such as 'predominant', 'marginal', or 'constitute', and ensure accurate spelling throughout.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent errors in punctuation and grammar. For example, you use periods where commas are needed (e.g., '...Australia ,with the data...'), and there are issues with subject-verb agreement and sentence fragments (e.g., 'which twice the propertion...'). These errors occasionally distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation will help improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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