Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The depicted chart shows shows information regarding the types and location of dance of adults in a town in Australia.
The community halls and other are about 18 percent.After school about 24 percent people take part in dance and private student are about 48 percent who take part in dance practice.Colloege based studio are about 10 percent.
The type of dance classes taken by 11 to 16 are about 500 by modern ,tap about 450 andballet by 300.similarly under 11 take about 300 modern 480 about tap and round about 609 ballet.
The given charts depicts the number of students engaged in dance practice.Different type of students take part in dances in different proportion,which increases or decreases with passage of time . Different types of music classes shows different types of percentage of students involved in different categories.private studio have more proportion of dance students as compared to school and college based studios.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. The data is presented in a fragmented manner, and there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the figures (e.g., 'round about 609 ballet' when the chart shows 600). The response lacks a coherent structure, and the comparison between the two charts is weak. The final paragraph introduces irrelevant commentary about the passage of time, which is not supported by the static data provided. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant trends and grouping data logically rather than listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is poorly organized. Paragraphs are disjointed, and there is no logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are largely absent or used incorrectly, such as the abrupt transition between the location data and the dance type data. The referencing is unclear, and the lack of linking words makes the text difficult to follow. The final paragraph feels disconnected from the previous sections, failing to synthesize the information effectively. Improving the use of transition signals and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'about' and 'different'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'Colloege' and 'private student' (instead of private studios). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'majority', 'minority', 'account for', and 'distributed among'. Avoid repeating the same phrases to describe percentages.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'chart shows shows', 'classes shows'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence construction. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for minor slips in spelling and punctuation. Developing the ability to use complex sentences would also help raise your score.
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