Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the data about the place and the table represents the types of dance classes of different age groups that are currently attending in a village in Australia.
Overall, private studios have the highest ratio and college-based studios have the lowest ratio. In terms of type of classes, ballet is more popular among the under 11 years while modern dance is more popular between the 11 to 16 age group.
Initially, almost 48% of dance classes held in private studios, whereas school halls contribute half of the private studios which is 24%. Community halls and other account for 18% of dance classes while college-based studios represent only the smallest share, just at 10%.
On the other side, approximately 600 students take interest in ballet which is the highest amount that is more common under 11 years age group , while above 11 to 16 age group like modern type dance class and almost 510 candidates are taking these classes. Only 300 number of learners of the age of 11 to 16 years are showing interest in ballet while under 11 years same amount of numbers are attending modern classes. In tap type classes under 11 years students take a little bit more interest (430), while nearly 410 pupils are participating in that type of class.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of both the pie chart and the table. You successfully highlighted the most popular locations and dance types, and made relevant comparisons between age groups. However, the analysis is slightly hindered by some inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, you state that school halls contribute 'half of the private studios', which is a misinterpretation of the data provided. Additionally, the description of the table data is somewhat cluttered and could be more clearly structured to highlight the key trends across the age groups. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are accurately transcribed and that comparisons are presented with greater precision.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on the two different charts. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In terms of', and 'On the other side' to guide the reader. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel slightly forced. The referencing is generally clear, but the internal structure of the final paragraph is a bit repetitive, which impacts the overall progression of ideas. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between data points would enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'contribute', and 'participating'. However, there are some instances of imprecise word choice and awkward collocations, such as 'take interest in' instead of 'are interested in' or 'show interest in', and 'smallest share, just at 10%'. There is also a slight repetition of basic vocabulary. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'account for', 'constitute', or 'predominant', and ensure that your word choices are consistently natural and accurate in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'the under 11 years' (should be 'those under 11 years'), 'above 11 to 16 age group like' (subject-verb agreement error), and 'Only 300 number of learners' (redundant phrasing). While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions will help improve the accuracy of your writing.
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