Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the location and different categories of dances classes by age group in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, People significantly going more in private studios while less in college based studios. In addition, ballet dance represent highest while modern dance has lowest.
In firstly, there are four different dance location where people went less and high proportion. Private studios is most popular location where highest proportion of people was went at 48%. While the lowest proportion at college based studious. school halls after school was considerably climbed 24% and 18% in community halls and others respectively.
Secondly, Ballet dance has vast majorities in age group under 11 around 600 students whoever, less popular for age group 11-16 nearly by 300 students present. Modern dance represent second position for age group 11-16 above 500 student participation . followed by 300 learns present in under 11 year in modern dance class . Above 400 peoples like to tap dance under 11 years group while 400 adolesce people like to tap dance .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, identifying the most popular locations and dance types. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial and lacks precision in reporting data. For instance, the statement 'Ballet dance has vast majorities in age group under 11 around 600 students' is slightly inaccurate as the chart shows 600 for ballet in the under 11 category, but the phrasing is awkward. The comparison between age groups is attempted but lacks clarity due to grammatical issues. To improve, ensure that data points are cited accurately and that comparisons are clearly linked to the specific categories provided in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or incorrect, such as 'In firstly' and 'whoever' (used incorrectly as a conjunction). The progression of ideas is sometimes disjointed, particularly in the second paragraph where the transition between locations and dance types is abrupt. While there is an attempt to use linking words, they are not always used appropriately, which affects the overall flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'considerably climbed' (which is not a standard collocation for describing percentages) and 'adolesce people' (which is not a standard term). The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more accurate collocations for data description, such as 'accounted for' or 'represented a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'ballet dance represent'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'was went'), and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often poorly constructed and contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which makes some sentences difficult to parse. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring correct verb forms will help improve the clarity and accuracy of your writing.
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