Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart and line diagram illustrates the specific areas in australia and different types of dance classes young individuals are currently learning.
Overall, the pie chart shows summary of location of dance classes.Moreover almost half of these classes are happening in private studio.The bar diagram compares the types of dance classes. Furthermore, the bar chart specify the age groups and number of students who are taking these classes.
Looking closely into details, the pia chart shows five different locations of dance classes. private studios contribute at 48% OF location, followed by school halls contribute at 24%, the college-based studios contribute at 10%.
On the other hand, the line diagram describes the three different types of dances. However, the ballet is the most popular tyoe in students under 11 is the ballet which is taking by almost 600 students. In contrast only approximatly 300 students learning the ballet type.
The dance most famous under the age of 11-16 is the modern type learning by almost 550 students. In addition, the third type of dance is Tap with almost same popularity in both age groups.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the visual data, including the breakdown of locations and dance types across age groups. However, there are significant misinterpretations and inaccurate reporting of the data presented in the charts. For instance, the student states that ballet is 'taking by almost 600 students' in one age group and 'only approximatly 300 students learning the ballet type' in another, which confuses the categories and metrics shown in the stimulus. Furthermore, the charts are incorrectly identified as a 'line diagram' and 'bar diagram' when they are actually pie charts and bar charts. While the overview attempts to summarise the main information, the lack of accurate data reporting pulls the score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is structured into multiple paragraphs, including an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by inaccurate descriptions and poor transitions. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'However', which do not accurately signal the logical relationships between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is somewhat haphazard, mixing location data and dance type data without clear separation. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, leading to a score of 5.0 for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'shows', 'types', and 'students'. There are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'line diagram' instead of bar chart, 'pia chart' instead of pie chart, and awkward phrasing like 'contribute at 48% OF location'. Spelling mistakes such as 'approximatly' and 'tyoe' further detract from the quality of the response. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate, justifying a score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and overly basic complex structures with frequent errors. There are notable grammatical mistakes, including subject-verb agreement errors like 'The pie chart and line diagram illustrates' and missing auxiliary verbs or incorrect passive forms, such as 'learning by almost 550 students' instead of 'learned by'. Punctuation and capitalization are also flawed (e.g., lowercase 'australia'). These errors frequently cause strain for the reader, placing this response firmly at Band 5.0.
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