Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph and pie chart illustrates about the location and types of dance classes young people in a city in Australia are currently attending.
Overall, it is readily apparent that private studios are the most popular locations for dance classes, while college-based studios account for the smallest proportion. However, in dance types, ballet is more popular among children under 11, whereas modern dance is the most popular choice among those aged 11-16.
To commence with, the location of dance classes, private studios are by far the most common, accounting for 48% of all classes. This is followed by schools halls, at 24%, which is exactly half the figure for private studios. community halls and other as well as college-based are least common venue, respectively at 18% and 10%. Furthermore, types of dance classes, the most popular in under 11 aged is ballet, which is 600 students and 11-16 aged is modern is around 530 students. Ballet aged 11-16 and modern under 11 are least dance classes are respectively around 300 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies and reports the main features of both the line graph and the pie chart, providing clear comparisons between dance class locations and dance types across age groups. In the introduction, the student notes that private studios are the most popular location. In the body paragraphs, relevant data points such as 48% for private studios and student numbers for ballet and modern dance are appropriately cited. However, there are minor issues with mechanical data reporting and slight awkwardness in phrasing, such as 'Ballet aged 11-16 and modern under 11 are least dance classes are respectively around 300 students.' Despite these minor stylistic lapses, all parts of the prompt are addressed, fulfilling the criteria for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a recognizable introduction, overview, and body paragraph structure. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall, it is readily apparent', 'To commence with', and 'Furthermore'. However, cohesion is at times faulty or mechanical. For instance, the transition 'Furthermore, types of dance classes, the most popular in under 11 aged is ballet...' feels abrupt and awkward. Additionally, paragraphing is somewhat disorganized, mixing location data and dance type data within the final body paragraph rather than separating them into distinct logical sections. Referencing is occasionally unclear, leading to an overall score of 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student displays an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'proportion', 'common', and 'venue'. However, there are notable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as writing 'schools halls' (instead of school halls) and 'community halls and other as well as college-based are least common venue' (grammatical and lexical mismatch). Spelling is generally acceptable, but phrasing is sometimes unnatural, as seen in 'under 11 aged' and 'least dance classes'. These limitations place the lexical performance firmly at Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'While college-based studios account for the smallest proportion' and 'which is exactly half the figure for private studios.' However, the text contains frequent grammatical errors and awkward syntactical constructions, particularly in the third paragraph where sentences become convoluted and lack verbs or proper subjects, e.g., 'Ballet aged 11-16 and modern under 11 are least dance classes are respectively around 300 students.' While these errors do not completely obscure the intended meaning, they impede smooth reading and reduce the accuracy of complex structures, warranting a Band 5.5.
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