Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart demonstrate the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in australia are currently attending, measuring unit in percentage.
As an overall trend, it could be seen that the pie chart illustrate the location of dance classes, in which 4 location of dance classes such as Community halls & other, private studios, school halls ( after-school), college-based studios.
According to the given pie chart, it is crystal clear that the the location of private studios which is most escalate utilize approximately 48% as compared with others location. while, the most determined utilize of location is college-based- studios approximately 10%. Moreover, remaining two location of dance classes which is moderate utilize such as Community halls & other, school halls ( after-school) about 18%, 24%.
Categorically speaking after remaining the number of students under 11, and 11 to 16, in which type of dance classes (by age group) such as Ballet, tap, modern to be utilized.
By age group under 11, In ballet type of dance class a wide range of students utilized escalately about 600. while, in tap a meduim range of students utilized about 420. Moreover, at the last type of dance class is modern in which a small number to be utilized about 300.
By age group under 11 to 16 , In modern type of dance class a wide range of students utilized escalately about 520. while, in tap a meduim range of students utilized about 450. Moreover, at the last type of dance class is ballet in which a small number to be utilized about 300.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover both charts regarding the location and types of dance classes by age group. However, the information is presented with significant inaccuracies and a lack of clear synthesis. For instance, the percentages quoted for locations (e.g., private studios at 48%, college-based at 10%) misinterpret the visual data, and the figures for age groups are also inaccurately reported. While the writer attempts to select and report main features and comparisons, the data is not accurately represented, pulling the score down to Band 4.0 according to the descriptors for misreporting key information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The response has an overall structure with paragraphs dedicated to different parts of the prompt, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing phrasing, such as 'Categorically speaking after remaining the number of students under 11...'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes incorrectly, leading to confusion. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak. Referencing is often unclear, resulting in a score of 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The student uses a very basic and repetitive vocabulary, relying heavily on simple verbs and adjectives like 'utilized', 'wide range', and 'small number'. There are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'the location of private studios which is most escalate utilize' and 'meduim range'. Less common vocabulary is attempted but misused, causing strain for the reader at times. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student attempts some complex sentence structures, but these are frequently faulty and fraught with grammatical errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The pie chart demonstrate'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'most escalate utilize'), and missing prepositions. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also poorly managed, with many run-on or fragmented clauses. Because errors are frequent and occasionally obscure meaning, the writing falls into the Band 4.0 category.
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