Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This illustration gives information about the different place and kind of the dance classes for young people in a city of Australia are nowadays attending.

It is quite evident form the pie chart that the 18 percent of dance classes held in the community hall and other places and 24 percent of classes located in Australian school halls after the lecture of the school end. Further,10 percent of dance classes conduct in the college based studios. Remaining 48 percent of dance lecture held in private studios.

However, the bar chart give information about the different kind of dance classes. Dance classes divided into different group according to age. At the age of between 11 to 16 year 300 student join Ballet classes and under the age of 11 year 600 students join Ballet dance classes. And under the age of 11 year almost 450 students participate in Tap dance classes and 300 students join Modern dance classes. The students who age between 11 to 16 years almost 430 student participate in Tap dance classes and around 510 students join Modern dance classes.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart, making clear comparisons between age groups and dance types. For instance, the writer accurately highlights that private studios hold 48 percent of dance classes and contrasts participation numbers between the under-11 and 11-to-16 age brackets (e.g., 600 students joining Ballet under 11 versus 300 in the older group). While the reporting is generally accurate, some details are slightly imprecise (such as stating 'dance lecture' instead of class or session). Overall, the response effectively selects and reports the key data points, satisfying the core requirements of Task Achievement at a Band 6.0 level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear separation of paragraphs addressing different visual aids (the pie chart is discussed in the second paragraph and the bar chart in the third). However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or faulty. Transitions like 'Further,' and 'However,' are awkwardly placed or misused in terms of logical contrast. Referencing can also be repetitive, and the progression between sentences within paragraphs feels somewhat disjointed due to structural limitations. Paragraphing is present and separates the introduction, body details, and secondary chart information appropriately, placing the response firmly at a Band 6.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to data reporting and percentages, such as 'proportion', 'percent', and 'participate'. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'different place and kind' instead of locations and types, 'dance lecture' instead of classes, and 'The students who age between' instead of aged between. Less common lexical items are attempted but lack precision. Spelling is generally accurate, but vocabulary limitations and awkward phrasing prevent the score from reaching higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and relative clauses, such as 'dance classes young people in a town in Australia are nowadays attending' (missing relative pronoun/omission), '10 percent of dance classes conduct in the college based studios' (passive voice error), and 'At the age of between 11 to 16 year' (preposition and pluralisation errors). Punctuation is basic. While these errors do not completely impede communication, their frequency places the response at a Band 5.0 for grammar.

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