Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The representations illustrate information on the location and kinds of dance lectures young people in a town in country Australia are currently participating.
Overall, the first chart indicates the locations for dance practice and shows that Private Studios accounted the most percentage of 48%. While on the other hand, the second chart depicts the type of dance performed by different age groups, in which the most of the proportion is held by Ballet for under 11 while for older than 11 hold proportion for Modern dance.
Initially, there are several locations for dance practice but Private studios accounted most with 48%. While, the school halls after school time were on second on the list and community halls were on third place. Whereas, College based studios showed the least amount of proportion.
Secondly, the types of dances were different for various age groups. Such as, Ballet accounted for most for people below age 11 while the Modern accounted least interest for them. In contrast, for age group 11 to 16 the Modern dance indicated the affection for people while the Ballet was the type of dance which didn't showed a good result from different age groups.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both charts, successfully identifying the dominant locations and dance types across different age groups. The introduction paraphrases the prompt appropriately, and an overview is provided in the second paragraph. Key data points are selected and contrasted, such as Private Studios accounting for 48% in the first chart and the breakdown of Ballet versus Modern dance by age. However, some data reporting lacks precision or completeness, and the comparison could be further developed to fully explore all available data categories, such as community halls and college-based studios. Consequently, the task achievement is solid yet slightly limited in detail, meeting the criteria for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical layout with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs dedicated to each chart. Cohesive devices are employed to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'Initially', 'While', and 'In contrast'. However, referencing and progression are sometimes awkward or mechanical, as seen with phrases like 'While on the other hand' and 'Secondly, the types of dances were different'. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate, but logical progression within paragraphs could be smoother to avoid choppy sentence structures. Overall, the organization achieves a Band 6.0 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms related to data and charts such as 'proportion', 'accounted', 'depicts', and 'categories'. Attempts are made to use less common vocabulary, but these are occasionally accompanied by inaccurate word choices or awkward collocations, such as 'dance lectures', 'accounted the most percentage', and 'indicated the affection for people'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but lexical inaccuracies restrict the score. The range is sufficient to communicate meaning clearly without impeding the reader, placing it firmly at Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writing exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating attempts at subordination and relative clauses. There are, however, frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'accounted the most percentage of 48%', 'older than 11 hold proportion', and 'didn't showed a good result'. Prepositional and article errors also occur throughout the text, such as 'on second on the list' and 'on third place'. Although these errors do not severely impede communication, they affect the overall accuracy of complex structures, resulting in a Band 5.0 score for this criterion.
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