Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts illustrate the information about the Australians youngsters dance classes routine.It can be seen that, private studios are the most practised dance location and ballet dance is the most common types by under 11 years old children.
From the pie chart, 48% children are doing their dance practise in private studios,which is half of the whole percentage. There are almost the same proportion in school halls and community halls and others accounted for 24% and 18% respectively. But the college-based studios aren't common in youngsters. Only 10% children used this for dance practise.
600 choose the ballet dance who are under 11 years old children Between that only half children choose this types of dance form whose age are 11-16 years old.
But, There are a significant change in the dance form of modern types. 520 children are doing this types whose age are 11-16 years old. But only 300 under 11 years old children are doing this dance form.
Overall, it is evident that modern types of dance classes are most famous in the 11-16 years old children.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt, reporting information from both the pie chart and the bar chart. An overview is provided in the introductory and concluding sentences. However, there are notable omissions and inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the text states that '600 choose the ballet dance who are under 11 years old children Between that only half children choose this types of dance form whose age are 11-16 years old,' which misreads the bar chart value for the 11-16 age group (which is actually 300, matching the statement, but phrased awkwardly). The description of the pie chart proportions contains minor inaccuracies, such as stating '48% children are doing their dance practise in private studios,which is half of the whole percentage' (48% is close to half, but mathematically imprecise). Overall, the task is addressed, but data selection and precision are inconsistent.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, attempting to separate the pie chart and bar chart data. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and poor sentence structuring, such as starting paragraphs abruptly with data points without adequate introductory context. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inappropriately, such as 'Between that only half children choose this types'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors (such as missing spaces after periods, e.g., 'routine.It can be seen that') further weaken the overall cohesion and flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and collocation errors. Examples include 'Australians youngsters dance classes routine', 'most practised dance location', and 'doing this types'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'proportion' and 'significant change', but these are marred by grammatical inaccuracies in their deployment. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the limited range of vocabulary and frequent lexical errors restrict the score to a 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, prepositions, and word order, such as '600 choose the ballet dance who are under 11 years old children', 'whose age are 11-16 years old', and 'are most famous in the 11-16 years old children'. Punctuation errors, including missing spaces after full stops and comma splices (e.g., 'private studios,which is half'), are recurrent. These errors frequently impede smooth reading, placing the response firmly in the band 5 category.
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