Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart illustrates the given information on the loction of dance classes youth individual in atown in australia are crrently attending.
Overall,it can be seen that the school halls accounted for largest proportion.While,the types of dance classes ballet recorded for largest share in under eleven .Whereas,the college-based studios represented the smallest proportion.
To begin with,It is clear that the private studios in after school accounted for 48% of the overall figure .The proportion of college based studios was 10% but the major trend was twice proportion and the private studios stood at 48%.Whereas,in under11 was ballet represented the largest proportion at 600number of students.The loction of dance classes in college based studios represented the lowest share at 10%.In addition, the community halls and other accounted for 18% and tap by age group was 300 number of students respectively.
Furthurmore,the types of dance classes was three type .Ballet accounted for 600 students in under eleven of the overall figure.The Tap recorded for largest proportion in under eleven approximatily 450% of students.In contrast,private studios consetuted the 48% of the overall figure. The school halls in after school made up 24% of the total.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both charts regarding the location of dance classes and the types of dance classes by age group. However, there are significant confusions in reporting data and mechanical reading of figures, such as stating 'tap by age group was 300 number of students respectively' or claiming 'approximatily 450% of students'. The overview identifies that school halls accounted for a large proportion, but key comparisons are muddled or inaccurately stated (e.g., confusing private studios with school halls). While the writer makes an attempt to present the main features, the confusion in data reporting prevents it from reaching a higher band. This corresponds to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by repetitive and disjointed sentences. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in mechanical transitions such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'Furthurmore'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is weak, leading to confusion regarding which data points are being contrasted. This places the response firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on formulaic phrasing from the prompt (e.g., 'location of dance classes', 'overall figure'). There are noticeable word choice errors and misuse of terminology, such as 'youth individual' and 'recorded for largest share'. Spelling errors are also present, including 'loction', 'crrently', and 'Furthurmore'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple information, which aligns with Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in clause structure, article usage, and prepositions (e.g., 'in under eleven of the overall figure', 'ballet represented the largest proportion at 600number of students'). Punctuation and capitalization errors are widespread throughout the text, including spaces before commas. While basic meaning can sometimes be deciphered, errors are frequent and cause difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptors.
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