Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided pie chart presents crucial information about attending a dance classes by teenagers in Australia and the geography of the town and dance types.Overall, it is apparent that private studios accounted for the highest atttendees whereas community halls and others remained at a minimum. It is worth noting that school halls accounted for neither less nor more attendees.
Analyzing the graph thoroughly, the attendees who took classes in private studios witnessed the highest emrollment at 48% which was followed by school halls at 24%. However, the youngsters who attended claases in community halls and other were only 18%.
Closely looking at the types of dance classes, modern dances were mostly performed by the age group from 11 to 16 which is around by 500 students while 300 sudents participated in modern danceby the age group under 11 . However, the least contribution in ballet classes were by the age group from 11 to 16 whereas the age group under 11 attended the most which is around 600 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers both parts of the visual data (location and types of dance classes by age group), presenting an overview and selecting key features for comparison. For instance, the response correctly highlights that private studios accounted for the highest attendees at 48%, while community halls remained low at 18%. In the second body paragraph, specific comparisons between age groups and dance styles are made, such as noting that modern dances were mostly performed by the 11-16 age group (around 500 students) and ballet was most popular among the under-11s (around 600 students). While some phrasing is a bit imprecise, all main trends are addressed, which satisfies the requirements for Band 6.5 to 7.0. Because some parts are slightly underdeveloped regarding broader comparisons, a Band 6.0 is appropriate here.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into an introduction, an overview paragraph, and two body paragraphs, establishing a clear logical progression overall. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'Analyzing the graph thoroughly', and 'However'. However, some cohesive links and referencing are slightly mechanical or awkward (e.g., 'school halls accounted for neither less nor more attendees', which is unclear). Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within sentences occasionally slips, impacting the flow. This performance aligns with the Band 6 descriptors.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for an Academic Task 1 response, using terms such as 'attendees', 'enrollment', 'proportion', and 'age group'. However, there are several lexical errors and awkward collocations throughout the text, including 'attending a dance classes', 'atttendees', 'emrollment', 'claases', and 'contribution in ballet classes'. Additionally, 'the geography of the town' in the introduction is imprecise for a simple chart showing proportions. These errors indicate a Band 5.5 to 6.0 level, where an adequate range is shown, but noticeable inaccuracies persist.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses and comparative constructions (e.g., 'the attendees who took classes in private studios witnessed the highest enrollment at 48% which was followed by school halls at 24%'). However, there are frequent grammatical errors, missing articles, and punctuation issues, including 'attending a dance classes', 'modern danceby', and missing commas before dependent clauses. Despite these errors, the meaning is generally clear and does not impede communication, placing the response solidly in Band 6.0.
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