Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart shows the information about on the location and types of dance classes people in area in Australia are currently attending.
And also illustrates the details by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison here relevant.
Overall, under the 11, the highest percentage of the attending dance in private studio is on peak rather than others area , and minimum average number of student of attending the class is little bit peak.
First of all, in the college base studios, the location of dances classes currently extreme lowest is 10 percentage. Second in the school hails after school, here it is the average percentage location of music classes is 24%. The highest indicate the classes in the private studio is 48% rather than other classes area in Australia.
And also include under the 11 age groups in the ballet currently attending the lesson is 300. On the other hand, in the tap, the number of 11 to 16 age groups is 450 apparently in Australia.
And last modern time, the number of student age groups under 11 and also 11 to 16 in 500 and 11 to 16 age groups are very low 300 in Australia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt, mentioning the location of dance classes and the types by age group. However, the data reported contains several significant inaccuracies. For instance, the student states that 'in the ballet currently attending the lesson is 300' for under 11s, whereas the chart shows 600. Similarly, data points are conflated or misread throughout, such as confusing student counts with percentages. While an overview is attempted, it is poorly executed and lacks clarity. Ideas are under-developed due to inaccurate data reporting and a failure to clearly select and compare the main features of the charts. This corresponds to a Band 4.5 level, rounded to 5.0 for positive marking of task engagement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward referencing and mechanical cohesive devices like 'First of all' and 'Second'. The relationships between sentences are often unclear, and referencing pronouns do not always point smoothly to their antecedents. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas feels disjointed—mixing information about locations and age groups without a clear structure. There is no clear overall progression guiding the reader through the data. This performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors, where organization is present but overall progression is lacking and cohesive devices are used inaccurately.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and direct lifting of terms from the prompt, such as 'location', 'dance classes', 'young people', and 'Australia'. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'extreme lowest', 'school hails', and 'music classes' (when discussing dance). Noticeable errors in word formation and terminology cause some difficulty for the reader and obscure meaning in places. This meets the criteria for Band 4.5, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and errors in word choice strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. The student attempts some complex sentence patterns, but these are almost always faulty, featuring missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and fragmented clauses (e.g., 'The chart shows the information about on the location...' and 'And also illustrates the details by selecting...'). Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues and tense confusion. These errors regularly cause difficulty for the reader and occasionally distort the intended meaning. This performance fits the Band 4.5 descriptor profile.
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