Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given pie chart and bar graph demonstrates that location and types of dance classes in a town among a young people of Australia who are attending. Overall, pie chart depict the location of dance classes Community halls & other 18%, School halls(after school) 24%,College based studios 10% and the private studios followed highest 48%.

At a fleeting glance, Horizontal Bar Graph represents a types of dance classes who attend dance class under the age of 11 and on another hand 300 students are under the age of 11-16 .

It is seemed Ballet Dance are attended by 600 under the 11, and under the age are on the ratio of 300, 450 students attend the Tap class who are under 11 and 400 students are under 11-16 and Modern dance attend by 300 students under 11 and students who are in age 11-16 are more than 500 in Modern Dance.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover both charts, providing figures for the location percentages and the dance types across age groups. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and interpretation. For instance, the phrase '300 students are under the age of 11-16' misinterprets the data structure, as 11-16 is an age range, not a single age. Additionally, the overview is weak and grammatically tangled ('In the given pie chart and bar graph demonstrates...'). While the main features such as private studios having 48% and the breakdown of ballet and modern dance are mentioned, the lack of a clear, coherent summary and imprecise reporting keep this score at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is divided into three brief paragraphs, but the overall progression is disjointed and difficult to follow. Cohesive devices and transition phrases are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'At a fleeting glance, Horizontal Bar Graph represents a types of dance classes who attend dance class under the age of 11 and on another hand...' Pronoun referencing and logical linking between sentences are weak, causing the reader to stumble. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical flow, resulting in a Band 5.0 performance for this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and often repetitive. Phrases like 'followed highest' and 'dance classes who attend dance class' demonstrate a limited command of appropriate collocations and word forms. There are also awkward word choices, such as 'It is seemed Ballet Dance are attended'. While the student manages to communicate basic data terms (pie chart, bar graph, percentages), the range of vocabulary is narrow and insufficient to achieve a higher band, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The opening sentence contains a severe structural error ('In the given pie chart and bar graph demonstrates that...'), where the subject of the sentence is trapped inside a prepositional phrase. There are frequent errors with subject-verb agreement ('Ballet Dance are attended', 'Modern dance attend by') and articles ('a town', 'a young people'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are generally faulty and prone to errors that cause difficulty for the reader, placing this at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0.

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