Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts given below gives information about different types of young dancers who are currently attending in a town in Australia and their location.
Overall, the propotion of private studios is maximum. There is just a slight difference between the percentage of community halls & other and school halls ( after-school ). However, the college-based studios has less percentage among all. There are three dance clases named as ballet, tap and modern.
The most attending dance location is private studios which contains 48% of dancers. The school halls ( after-school ) has 24% of dancers and comes at second place. However, the community halls & other and college-based studios has least propotion of dancers which is 18% and 10% respectively.
At first, ballet contains 600 dancers aging under 11 and half of this aging from 11-16. Tap has under 11 dancers between 400 and 500 and 11-16 age group dancers almost 410. Moreover, modern dance class has 300 dancers who are undre 11 and almost 510 dancers whose age is from 11-16.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the prompt by describing both the location chart and the dance types by age group. Key data points are selected and reported, such as private studios standing at 48% and ballet having 600 dancers under 11. However, some comparisons are weak or missing, and there are minor inaccuracies in reporting the visual data, such as stating that tap has 'dancers between 400 and 500' when the value is around 450, or describing 11-16 ballet dancers as 'half of this aging'. The overview sentence in paragraph two ('Overall, the propotion of private studios is maximum') is rather simplistic. The response adequately addresses the task but lacks depth in synthesis and comparison.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, body paragraphs for location, and body paragraphs for dance types. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by weak mechanical cohesion. For instance, transitional phrases like 'At first' and 'However' are used repetitively or somewhat unnaturally. Referencing and cohesive devices are basic, leading to a somewhat disjointed feel between sentences, as seen in 'The most attending dance location is private studios which contains 48% of dancers. The school halls ( after-school ) has 24% of dancers and comes at second place.' Paragraphing is present but could be more cohesive.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with domain-specific terms like 'private studios', 'ballet', 'tap', and 'modern'. However, there are frequent word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'propotion' (misspelled), 'most attending dance location' instead of 'most popular location', and 'has less percentage' instead of 'accounts for the lowest percentage'. Attempts at less common vocabulary are limited and often inaccurate. Spelling errors ('undre') also detract from the lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the college-based studios has less percentage', 'the community halls & other and college-based studios has least propotion'), incorrect prepositions ('currently attending in a town'), and clumsy relative clauses. Punctuation around parentheses also shows spacing issues. While meaning is generally clear, the frequency of basic grammatical errors keeps the score at this level.
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