Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The Charts illustrate currently attending diffent types of dance classes by young indivisual in town of a Australia at several specified locations.

Overall, Pie chart shows the different location of classes andthier distrbution in a town. Almost half dance classes perfemed at private studion in a town. While, bar show the types and numbers of attendies on the bases of age. Overall, under 11 years attendies are higher in modern dance while more than 11 years old are higher in ballet dance types

Dance classes at College-baese studies are less by 10% in overall in town. While, One fourth classes are held at school after school finished. Moreover, community hall & others hold 18% dance classses as compared other spots in a town.

Attendies of dances classe are under 16 years old. Ballet dance has half attendies than which are in age range between 11 to 16. While tap dance attendies have minner diffrence between unber 11 and higher ages attendies. Moreover, modern dance type have 300 attendies are under 11 years and more than 500 are higher than 11 years old.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to cover all parts of the task by mentioning both the pie chart and the bar chart, noting that private studios are the most popular location and referencing age groups for different dance types. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data. For instance, the student states that 'under 11 years attendies are higher in modern dance while more than 11 years old are higher in ballet dance types', which contradicts the bar chart where 11-16 year-olds have the highest attendance in modern dance (520) and under-11s are highest in ballet (600). Furthermore, the data reporting contains several confusions and inaccuracies regarding percentages and figures. Ideas are presented, but the lack of accuracy in reporting the main features keeps this score at Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response is divided into paragraphs, which attempts an overall structure, but the logical progression is heavily disrupted by confusing sentences and poor referencing. Transition words like 'While', 'Moreover', and 'Overall' are used repetitively and often inappropriately (e.g., 'While, bar show the types...'). Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or mechanical, and the relationship between sentences is frequently unclear. Paragraphing is attempted, but because the ideas within paragraphs lack a clear, logical thread and suffer from numerous referencing errors, the organisation falls below Band 5 standards.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and contains numerous spelling and word-choice errors that impede communication. Examples include 'diffent' (different), 'indivisual' (individual), 'thier' (their), 'distrbution' (distribution), 'perfemed' (performed), 'studion' (studios), 'attendies' (attendees), 'College-baese' (college-based), and 'minner' (minor). The student attempts some less common terms related to the prompt (e.g., 'distribution', 'community hall'), but the heavy density of non-systematic spelling errors and incorrect word forms ('attendies' instead of 'attendees') severely limits the precision and appropriateness of the lexical resource.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, and simple sentences are frequently malformed. There are persistent, major errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage (e.g., 'currently attending diffent types of dance classes by young indivisual in town of a Australia', 'dance classes at College-baese studies are less by 10% in overall in town'). Complex sentence attempts invariably result in awkward or ungrammatical phrasing. Punctuation is also erratic, with misplaced commas interrupting basic clauses. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader.

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