Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart compares four different areas of dance classes, while, the bar chart compares different types of dance classes adolescent in Australia mostly participated in.
Overall, the usage of private studio is almost the half of total contribution, showing the highest contribution. However, participation in ballet is most favourable.
The private studios made up the lion's share of total 48%. In additon, the usage of school halls are almost the half, standing at 24%. However, commuity halls and other, and college base studios made the total of 28% showing the least contribution today.
The childern aged under 11 shows the highest contribution hit a peak of above 600 students in ballet, while childern aged about 11-16 shows the least contribution of less than 300 students, however, the reverse trend is experienced in childern aged from 11 to 16, about more than 500 younger generation showing significant interest toward modern type of dances, while childern aged under 11 is standing at just 300 students. The participator in tap shows the similar trend of almost 470 and 420 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover both charts, providing an overview and mentioning key features such as the dominance of private studios (48%) and the popularity of ballet for under-11s (600 students). However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the text claims that 'usage of school halls are almost the half' of private studios, but 24% is half of 48%, whereas the pie chart shows private studios make up 48% of the total, and school halls make up 24% of the total (making school halls half of the private studio figure, which the student phrased rather confusingly). Additionally, the description of the bar chart contains awkward phrasing and minor confusions regarding age groups and data points. Nevertheless, the main trends are addressed, supporting a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the charts. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by clumsy transitions and run-on sentences. For example, the sentence '...while, the bar chart compares...' contains an inappropriate comma and conjunction pairing. Cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'However' and 'while'. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion of sentences and transitions requires improvement to achieve a clearer logical flow, placing this performance at Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting some less common phrases such as 'lion's share', 'significant interest', and 'favourable'. However, there are frequent word choice errors, spelling mistakes ('additon', 'commuity', 'childern', 'participator'), and awkward collocations (e.g., 'usage of private studio', 'college base studios'). Vocabulary control is inconsistent, and these lexical inaccuracies occasionally cause slight confusion for the reader. This performance aligns well with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as subordinate clauses beginning with 'while' and 'as'. However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The childern aged under 11 shows', 'the usage of school halls are'), punctuation errors (unnecessary commas interrupting sentence flow), and awkward phrasing. These errors are noticeable and require some effort from the reader to interpret, although communication is not totally impeded. This warrants a Band 5.0.
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