Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The structure shares knowledge on location and types of dance classes by young people in Australia are now attending. Dance periods are crucial for developing the confidence and representing nation on international levels.
In the first diagram, the location of dance sessions of cummunity halls and others is about 18%. In the next the school parts approach to 24%. In the furthur more, the private studios are 48% while the college bases studio is 10%
In the last diagram, it shows the age group between under 11 to 16. In the ballet, it indicates under 11 age group more than 600 and 300 which is half to 11-16 years old students in it. In tap group, it shows more under 11 students more than 400 while older than this age is lil bit smaller in amount of about 425 students to it. In the modern group, it shows more than 500 students of 11-16 years and only 300 students of under 11.
In the conclusion, the age group gives more significance about dance. As it indicates the interest of the different ages children for dance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of both charts, mentioning private studios at 48%, school halls at 24%, community halls at 18%, and college-based studios at 10%. It also references the age groups and dance types, noting figures such as over 600 for ballet under 11 and around 520 for modern dance in the 11-16 age group. However, the overview is missing entirely, as the opening and closing paragraphs contain irrelevant commentary rather than a summary of key trends. Furthermore, some data reporting is confused and imprecise, particularly when describing the comparisons between age groups. This corresponds to a Band 5 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into multiple paragraphs, but the logical progression is frequently disrupted. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'In the furthur more' and 'In the last diagram, it shows'. The referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of comparisons between the two age groups. Paragraphing is attempted, but the concluding paragraph fails to summarise the main trends, instead offering a weak, disjointed opinion. These features reflect Band 5 performance descriptors, where organisation is present but overall progression lacks clarity.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several awkward word choices and spelling errors (e.g., 'cummunity', 'furthur', 'bases' instead of 'based'). The writer relies heavily on simple terms drawn directly from the prompt, showing a very limited range. While the intended meaning is occasionally conveyed, noticeable errors in word formation and collocation cause strain for the reader. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, keeping the response firmly at Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on minimally adequate coverage for the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as in the opening sentence: 'The structure shares knowledge on location and types of dance classes by young people in Australia are now attending.' Complex sentence attempts are frequently faulty and clumsy, leading to obscured meaning in places. Punctuation is basic, and simple structures dominate. The frequency of errors places this firmly in the Band 5 category, as errors often cause difficulty for the reader.
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