Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart and bar graph represents the data of places where dance classes are taken place and three unique dances youth along with their age in a town of Australia.
private studios reach alomst half as 48% from the, on the other hand individuals who are below 11 are highly interested in ballet and 11-16 are mainly focus on modern dance.
From both age group tap dance have moderate amount of numbers; after private studios, community hall stands second by 18 %. School halls is reaching upto quater 24% and so do college-based studios with 10%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to cover both the pie chart and the bar graph by mentioning private studios at 48%, community halls at 18%, and school halls at 24%, alongside some age-group details. However, the response falls severely short of the mandatory 150-word minimum, containing only 97 words. This under-length results in significant under-development of the required overview and key comparisons. Furthermore, there are inaccuracies in reporting data, such as stating school halls reach 'quater 24%' which is slightly confused in phrasing, and omitting key comparative details between the age groups for different dance types. Because the length requirement is not met, Task Achievement is capped below Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is divided into three very brief paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body, and conclusion-like structure. However, the logical progression is weak due to the fragmentary nature of the sentences. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as 'from the, on the other hand individuals' and 'and so do college-based studios with 10%.' Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall organization fails to build a cohesive, well-structured report. Paragraphing is attempted but lacks sufficient substance to be fully appropriate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally hinder comprehension (e.g., 'alomst' instead of 'almost', 'quater' instead of 'quarter', 'are taken place' instead of 'take place'). The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary like 'private studios', 'ballet', and 'modern dance', but the range is limited and inadequate for a fully realized Academic Task 1 response, restricting the lexical score to the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple and flawed complex attempts. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie chart and bar graph represents', 'tap dance have moderate amount'), preposition errors ('places where dance classes are taken place'), and missing articles. These errors create frequent reader difficulty, though the core meaning remains partially extractable.
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