Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided pie illustrates the proportion of dance club on at different location and the bar chart compares the number of students in terms of age group that attend dance classes in Australia.
Overall, it can be seen that the private studios accounted for the highest priportion as compared to the others and school halls ranked second. It can also be noticed that oyng generation are more interested in Ballet classes and recorded the highest figure.
The private studios accounted for 48%, making it the highest category, while location of dance classes stood at 24% for school halls .The community halls and other had 18% proportion and the college-based studios had 10% dance classes.
Regarding the bar chart, 600 young people aged 11 are attending ballet classes and 300 11 to 16 years old people are interested.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the visual data (the pie chart and the bar chart), providing an overview and some key figures. However, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 137 words, which incurs a penalty under Task Achievement. Furthermore, there are significant factual misinterpretations regarding the data. For instance, the student states that the 'young generation are more interested in Ballet classes and recorded the highest figure', which misreads the bar chart where Modern dance actually peaks at 520 for the 11-16 age group. Additionally, the phrase 'location of dance classes stood at 24% for school halls' is confusingly phrased, and the breakdown of ages in the final paragraph contains errors regarding the data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is structured into paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to the different charts. However, progression is hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical cohesion. While cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'while', and 'Regarding' are used, the logical flow is disrupted by inaccurate data reporting and repetitive sentence patterns. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final paragraph is abruptly cut off and underdeveloped. Overall arrangement shows some basic organization, but referencing and logical progression are noticeably faulty in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', and 'categorized'. However, there are several noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'priportion' instead of proportion, 'club on' instead of clubs, and 'oyng' instead of young. These lexical slips and typos detract from the quality of the response, although communication is generally maintained. Phrasing such as 'highest category, while location of dance classes stood at' reveals awkward collocation and imprecise use of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses and comparative structures ('as compared to the others'). However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition use, such as 'The provided pie illustrates the proportion of dance club on at different location' (should be 'clubs at different locations'). Punctuation and sentence structure in the final paragraph break down slightly. While some sentences are error-free, the frequency of grammatical slips limits the band score.
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