Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and bar chart demonstrates the recorded information of dance classes in Australia on the basis of locality and kinds in which young people are currently enrolled.
Overall, if we talk about the pie chart, it is quiet visible that there are total four locations and almost half of the portion is covered by Private studios that is about 48% of the total. We can see that the School halls are also widely available for this purpose that covers upto another 24%. Community halls & others are also available to some extent, but, the least availability is shown by College-based studios i.e. upto 10% only.
If we talk about the consideration of dance classes according to the age group as shown in bar chart, we can observe that most of the students under 11, takes part in Ballet, that is recorded upto 600 and the students ranging between 11 and 16, they were seen interested in Modern, i.e. 500. The Tap dance is normal on both sides, that is under 500 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the visual data by reporting information from both the pie chart and the bar chart. An overview is provided for the pie chart data, noting the dominant category (Private studios at 48%) and the lowest (College-based studios at 10%). Main features and comparisons are generally well-selected, noting key figures such as 600 for Ballet under 11 and 500 for Modern in the 11-16 age group. However, the overview is somewhat informal in tone ('if we talk about...'), and some descriptions lack precision, such as stating Tap dance is 'normal on both sides'. Nevertheless, the key data points are accurately identified and reported, satisfying the core requirements of Task 1.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently, dividing the information into an introduction, an overview/pie chart paragraph, and a bar chart paragraph. Logical progression is attempted; however, the use of conversational transitional phrases such as 'if we talk about' and 'quiet visible' detracts from the formal register expected in Academic Task 1. Cohesive devices are somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'We can see that...', 'also available'). Paragraphing is present and separates the two charts adequately, but overall management of cohesion prevents the text from achieving a higher band score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, though somewhat limited and repetitive. The student attempts some less common terms and accurately reports percentages and numbers (e.g., 'proportion', 'availability', 'age group'). However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'quiet visible' (instead of quite visible), 'covers upto' (instead of accounts for), and 'Tap dance is normal on both sides'. Spelling and word choice generally do not impede communication, but the lack of flexibility and precision keeps this criterion at Band 6.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and subordinate structures (e.g., 'kinds in which young people are currently enrolled', 'students ranging between 11 and 16, they were seen interested'). However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The pie chart and bar chart demonstrates'), redundant pronoun usage ('the students... they were seen interested'), and punctuation errors. Despite these errors, meaning is generally clear and does not impede the reader's understanding.
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