Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the chart illustrates some information on the location and type of dance young people in a town in australia are currently attending.at a glance, it clearly shows there a large no of students under the age of 11 .
firstly it is seen the a large no of dance dance classes are happening at private studios and the percentage is 48% moving onto the school halls that is 24%after school after that comes the community halls and others which is 18% a bit less than the school halls then comes the last one that is college based studios which is only 10% very much less than the others.after that the students are divded into some catagories in which 600 student under the age of 11 are attending ballet whereas only 300 students of age 11-16 do it then tap their is not much difference in that, 50 students more of age under 11 do it as compared to age11-16 and the last catogery mordern their is an unexpected change in it beacuse age11-16 attend around 500 and students under 11 are only 300.
to sum up,it is observed that both the age groups have diffrent intrests in diffrent category of dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address both parts of the prompt by describing the location of dance classes and the types of dance by age group. However, the coverage of data is somewhat incomplete and lacks precision. For instance, the figures for tap are described vaguely as having 'not much difference' rather than reporting the actual values (450 for under 11s and 420 for 11-16s). Furthermore, the overview attempted in the opening sentence is weak, and the response lacks a clear, well-developed summary of the main trends. While the percentages for locations are provided accurately (e.g., private studios at 48%), the overall data selection and reporting remain basic and under-developed, aligning best with a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response suffers significantly from poor cohesion, punctuation, and paragraphing. The entire text is essentially presented as one long, run-on block of text with very little appropriate punctuation or capitalisation at the start of sentences (e.g., 'the chart illustrates...', 'at a glance...'). Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive, frequently relying on additive links like 'then' and 'after that' without proper transition markers. There is no clear paragraph structure to separate the distinct charts or ideas, which makes the progression difficult to follow. This level of organisation corresponds to a Band 4.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited and repetitive vocabulary range, relying on basic terms such as 'dance', 'classes', 'students', and 'change'. There are noticeable spelling errors throughout the text, including 'divded', 'catagories', 'catogery', 'mordern', 'beacuse', and 'diffrent'. While the everyday vocabulary is sufficient to convey a general meaning, attempts at less common lexical items are either absent or misspelled. The frequent errors in word choice and spelling place this performance firmly within the Band 4.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatically, the response is weak, consisting largely of run-on sentences joined incorrectly by commas or conjunctions without proper subordination. There are notable grammatical errors and omissions, such as 'there a large no of students' (missing verb 'are') and 'tap their is not much difference' (confusing 'there' with 'their'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are generally faulty and lack control. Punctuation is almost entirely neglected, with missing periods and commas used inappropriately. These frequent grammatical and punctuation errors cause difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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