Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given charts illustrate the information about the location of dance class and types of dance taken by young people of a town in Australia right now.
Overall, it can be seen that private studio accoounted for the largest proportion regarding to the dance location. Ballet dance is more popular among children under 11 in contrast modern dance is much popular among age group 11-16.
Turning first to the pie chartwhich gives information on the location of dance classes. private studios are most common location for dance classes accounted for 48% of the total followed by school halls represented 24%. community halls & other stood at 18% while college-base studios are least least popular made 10% of the total.
The bar chart compares the types of dance classes. Between Individuals under 11 ballet is much prefered dance type taken by 600 while 450 number of students like tap dance and modern dance is least common taken by only 300. Among people with age group 11-16 medern dance is much prefered represent almost 520 students in contrast tap dance is prefered by 410 students and ballet is least popular accounted for 300 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses all parts of the prompt by summarizing the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart. An overview is provided, highlighting key differences such as the dominance of private studios for locations and the shift in dance types across age groups. Data is generally reported accurately, mentioning figures like 48% for private studios and 600 for ballet under 11. However, there are minor typos in some data points (e.g., stating 410 instead of 420 for tap dance in the 11-16 age group, though the visual value was approximate, and minor spelling issues). Overall, the task is adequately covered with relevant comparisons made, placing it comfortably at Band 6.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into four logical paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, body paragraph one detailing the pie chart, and body paragraph two discussing the bar chart. Cohesive devices are used to guide the reader, such as 'Overall', 'Turning first to', and 'in contrast'. However, cohesion and referencing suffer from mechanical errors, run-on sentences, and punctuation issues, such as 'chartwhich' and lowercase starting letters after periods (e.g., 'private studios are most common'). Paragraphing is appropriately utilized to separate distinct visual datasets, earning a solid Band 6 for this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying general trends using words like 'proportion', 'common', 'popular', and 'representation'. There are attempts at less common lexical items, but these are often accompanied by word-form or spelling errors, such as 'accoounted', 'college-base', and 'medern'. Collocations are mostly acceptable, but phrasing can be repetitive or slightly unnatural (e.g., 'taken by only 300' or 'medern dance is much prefered represent'). The range is sufficient to communicate meaning clearly despite noticeable spelling mistakes, fitting the Band 6 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses and comparative structures (e.g., 'Ballet dance is more popular among children under 11 in contrast modern dance is much popular...'). However, grammatical accuracy is limited by frequent punctuation errors, missing articles, capitalization mistakes, and spelling slips (e.g., 'accoounted', 'chartwhich', 'least least'). Several sentences lack proper punctuation or conjunctions, resulting in run-on structures. While meaning is rarely completely obscured, the frequency of errors prevents the grammar score from rising above Band 5.5.
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