Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The charts show detail on the location and what types of dance period adult person in a city in Australia are nowadays attending.

overall, the pie chart indicate the location of dance classes. private studios are the most dominent location at 48% of all classes, Whereas, school halls and after-school second amount of proportion accounted for 24%, community halls & other places make up 18%, while college based studios have the smallest share at only 10%

The bar chart compares the types of dance classes by age group. Furthermore, ballet had the highest accounting for 600 students choosing it, while under 11,double the figure for 11-16 year old. Whereas, tap dancing is relatively balanced, with about 450 young children and 400 older children. Moreover, modern is lowest than other under 11 just about 300 with students. After that older children chosse types of dance accounting for 520, with 11-16 age.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.0

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student covers all parts of the task by reporting information from both the pie chart and the bar chart, making basic comparisons between age groups. However, there are significant misinterpretations of the data, such as stating that 'ballet had the highest accounting for 600 students... while under 11, double the figure for 11-16 year old', which misreads the categories. The student misidentifies the target demographic, referring to 'adult person' and 'older children' rather than young people aged under 11 and 11-16. While an overview is attempted ('overall, the pie chart indicate...'), the overall response lacks clarity in data interpretation and contains inaccuracies regarding the visual information provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is structured into distinct paragraphs, attempting to separate the pie chart and bar chart analysis. However, logical progression is severely hindered by poor sentence construction and misuse of cohesive devices. Words like 'Whereas', 'Furthermore', and 'Moreover' are used mechanically and often inappropriately at the beginning of clauses, disrupting the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak. Referencing is also confusing, with abrupt transitions between sentences that make the relationships between the data points difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'dominent' (misspelled), 'proportion', and 'share', but word choice and collocation are frequently awkward or incorrect, as seen in 'what types of dance period adult person'. Spelling errors like 'dominent' and 'chosse' detract from the quality of the response. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the basic message, and lexical control is weak throughout the piece.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is poor. There are frequent, noticeable errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation. Examples include 'The charts show detail on the location and what types of dance period adult person... are nowadays attending' and 'modern is lowest than other under 11 just about 300 with students.' These errors frequently cause strain for the reader and impede clear communication, placing the response firmly in the band 5 range for grammar.

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