Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
I will illustrate the given map below, the data about places and types of entertainment classes of adult individuals, in area of Australia are currently catch.
well, the teen age group are attendent of private studios .mostly children jin classes in private studio ,becuase private studio give a good attention to students so thats why, people try to joins classes .otherone is the community & hall & Other conduct the classes. however after the school classes end .then mostly children performed in school halls . College based studios is lower to all other catagories .
According to this map different age group joining dance classes .we have a group between 11 to 16. Mostly children join the classes in age of under 11 . they are giving importance to choose private studio almost 48% are choosing this one. After that community hall & other 18% of elder in age of 11-16 group .After that, school halls after scholl children 24% However, college base studios is 10% .According to this map there are three types of dance which one is ballet on top and tap and moderen is less then to each other
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address both parts of the prompt regarding the location and types of dance classes. However, the interpretation of the data contains significant confusion, misinterpreting percentages as age groups and confusing the categories. For instance, the text states 'community hall & other 18% of elder in age of 11-16 group', which misreads the source data where 18% refers to community halls overall, and 11-16 is a separate demographic breakdown for dance styles. The overview is weak and confused, failing to clearly summarise the main trends or make accurate comparisons. Overall, the task is only partially addressed due to inaccuracies in data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation of the response is extremely fragmented and lacks a logical structure. The text opens with informal conversational remarks such as 'well, the teen age group are attendent' rather than an academic introduction. Paragraphing is highly erratic, consisting of short, disconnected sentences and broken clauses. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitions like 'After that' and 'According to this map' used mechanically to link unrelated points. Progression is virtually non-existent, making it difficult for the reader to follow a clear line of thought.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The student frequently misuses words or invents non-standard forms, such as 'attendent', 'jin classes', 'otherone', and 'catagories'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items, and word choices often interfere with clarity, such as 'entertainment classes of adult individuals' when referring to young people. Spelling mistakes and awkward phrasing severely constrain the range of vocabulary, limiting the response to a lower band level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures invariably result in severe errors, such as 'because private studio give a good attention to students so thats why, people try to joins classes'. Subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and article use are frequently neglected (e.g., 'college base studios is 10%', 'moderen is less then to each other'). Punctuation is faulty throughout, and frequent grammatical errors cause continuous strain for the reader.
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