Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart displays the imformation about the location of classes and the type of dance between different age groups.
overall,Public studios percentage is the higher and other is as follows the age groups has their own choices it varies between them.
Private studios has the highest percentage and community halls is on the second school halls on the third and cpllage based studios in on the fourth and it is the one with the least percentage.It is because of the convinence of the people in the loactions.School and collage percentage is less beacuse students has less time.Private studios and community hall is higher beacuse all the people attend them in there free time.
People of age 11 like the Ballet dance the most.And the tap is on the second for them and modern is the one they love least.And from gae 11 to 16 they like modern the most tap is on there second and ballet is the least.It is because different age groups has different choices.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both charts, noting that private studios are the most popular location and outlining the breakdown of dance types across age groups. However, there are significant weaknesses. The overview is poorly formed and contains spelling and structural errors ('Public studios percentage is the higher'). Furthermore, the student includes personal speculation ('It is because of the convinence of the people in the loactions') which is not present in the source data and violates Task 1 academic conventions. While main features such as the top location and general age preferences are touched upon, the lack of precise data reporting and the inclusion of irrelevant commentary pull the score down to Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the paragraphing is illogical and mixes the pie chart data with bar chart data haphazardly. Cohesive devices are minimal, repetitive, or inaccurate, relying heavily on basic linkers and repetitive phrasing like 'is on the second' and 'is the least'. There is no clear overall progression, and referencing is often ambiguous (e.g., 'and other is as follows'). The mechanical and sometimes faulty connection of ideas places this response firmly in Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'imformation', 'convinence', 'loactions', and 'collage'. The student struggles with basic collocations and word forms, writing 'cpllage based studios in on the fourth' and 'gae' instead of age. While the words are sufficient to convey a general meaning, the noticeable errors and limited range restrict the score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of sentence structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences linked by basic conjunctions. Frequent errors in subject-verb agreement ('the age groups has', 'students has'), articles, and prepositions are evident ('on the second school halls on the third'). Punctuation and capitalisation errors also occur frequently ('overall,Public'). These persistent errors cause strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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