Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town located in Australia are currently attending. Locations of dance classes consists of community halls and other, private studios, school halls and college-based studios
To begin with, dance classes consists of three different types of dances following that, private studios occupies 48% of the area after that, college-based studios covers 10% of the area then 24% is school halls and the remaining 18% is community halls also, ballet has 300 students of age group 11 to 16 and 600 students of students under the age of 11 years after that, tap has 450 students of age group 11 to 16 and 460 students of age group under 11 likewise goes for modern.
Overall, it is clear by the use of this graph that how much students are in perticular dance group and different ages it is now esy to calculate and maintain the attendence, the comparisons are relevent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover both charts, noting the location percentages and the dance types by age group. However, the data presentation lacks organisation and contains several inaccuracies, such as stating that tap has 460 students under 11 when the chart shows 450, and confusing modern dance data. Furthermore, the overview provided in the final paragraph is weak, merely commenting on the graph's utility rather than summarising the main trends. The student has included some relevant details, but the lack of accurate data selection and a clear overall trend keeps this response at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is poorly paragraphed, consisting of an introduction, one massive run-on second paragraph, and a brief concluding sentence. The second paragraph chains multiple clauses together using repetitive linkers like 'after that', 'then', and 'also', creating a dense and difficult-to-follow structure. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and inaccurately, lacking proper punctuation (such as full stops or semicolons) between distinct ideas. While the overall subject matter is discernible, the lack of clear logical progression and paragraphing structure results in a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for some basic sequencing.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on fundamental terms like 'students', 'age group', 'dance classes', and 'covers' or 'occupies'. There are frequent lexical limitations and awkward word choices, such as 'likewise goes for modern' and 'perticular dance group'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the range of vocabulary is restricted and inadequate for a higher band. Because the student attempts to name percentages and categories but lacks the lexical flexibility to discuss trends and proportions variedly, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits severe punctuation and sentence structure issues. The entire second paragraph is a massive run-on sentence joined by comma splices and conjunctions (e.g., '...studio covers 10% of the area then 24% is school halls... also, ballet has...'). There is a lack of control over complex sentence forms, and basic subject-verb agreement errors appear, such as 'dance classes consists'. The lack of terminal punctuation and correct sentence boundaries creates significant reading difficulty, restricting the grammar score to a Band 4.5, placed at 5.0 for attempting a mix of clauses.
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