Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given charts illustrate about present reporting of area and various styles of dance classes taken by different age groups in Australia.
Overall, the pie chart gives us information about four location of different forms of dance classes taken by young adults, while bar graph demonstrate based on age groups, under 11 and between 11 to16.
The given chart focus on four locations, first place with highest proporsion goes to private studios with 48%, followed by school halls (after- school) by 24% and community halls and other with 18%, while the least popular area amoung young adluts represented with only 10%.
The bar graph four different dance forms with tow different age groups, starting with under eleven, the most prefered dance is Ballet which accounted around 600 students and for 11 to 16 age group the most attended classes were modern with approximately around 520, in contrast tap dance form remained relatively popular in both the groups with under eleven group slightely over the other.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers the main parts of the task by reporting data from both the pie chart and the bar chart, such as the highest proportion of private studios at 48% and ballet being the most popular dance form for under 11s at approximately 600 students. However, there are several inaccuracies and omissions in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that the least popular area accounted for only 10% without naming college-based studios, and refers to 'four different dance forms' in the bar chart when only three are shown (Ballet, Tap, Modern). Furthermore, the comparison of tap dancing between the two age groups contains vague phrasing ('slightely over the other'). Consequently, the response achieves a Band 5.5 as it addresses the task partially with some under-developed or imprecise information.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has an overall structure with an introduction and body paragraphs attempting to address each chart. Paragraphing is present, though the division could be clearer. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'while', 'first place', and 'in contrast', but some linking is mechanical or inaccurate ('The given chart focus on four locations, first place with highest proporsion goes to...'). Progression is sometimes hindered by awkward sentence construction and repetitive introductory clauses like 'The given chart...'. Referencing is generally clear, but overall the flow lacks precision. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'proportion', 'popular', and 'approximately'. However, there are multiple spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'proporsion', 'amoung', 'adluts', 'tow', 'prefered', and 'slightely'. Additionally, phrases like 'illustrate about present reporting' and 'demonstrate based on age groups' show awkward collocation and unnatural phrasing. While communication of the general data points is not severely impeded, the frequency of lexical errors prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0, making a Band 5.0 score appropriate.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, using clauses with 'while', 'as', and 'with'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that affect readability. Examples include missing verbs or incorrect prepositional usage, such as 'while bar graph demonstrate based on age groups' and 'The bar graph four different dance forms with tow different age groups'. Punctuation is basic and sometimes missing around clauses. Because errors occur frequently and cause some difficulty for the reader, particularly in structural completeness, the response fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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