Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graphs which are shown provide detail on the location and kinds of dance classes adult people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
The pie chart show the location where dance classes are being held, and the percentage of students involving in the dance as per location. Whereas the types of dance classes is showns by the bar graph according to number of students and type of dance. As in the pie chart there are four loaction has been dedicated for dance, and it is divided into three major types in the bar graph.
Firstly, pie chart shows that, private studios have 48% which highest of all location. Similarly, community halls and other have 18%, school halls have 24% and the lowest percentage of students are in college-based studies which only 10%.
Lastly, types of dance classes according to number of students as per the age of students are illustrated by bar graph. In which the two categories also show for under 11 white bar and from 11-16 years black bar is used. The number of students in battet dance is high with 600 students under 11 years old. But there is a trent which followed by under 11 age students is decreasing in tap 450 and in modern dance only 300. Whereas the number students in modern dance type more popular among age group of 11 to 16.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover both charts, noting the location percentages and the trends across the two age groups for different dance types. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. Most notably, the introduction mischaracterises the target demographic as 'adult people' instead of young people, and the student confuses the age groups and dance types in the bar chart section, stating the highest bar for under 11s is 'battet' (ballet) with 600 students, while misreading modern dance popularity. Furthermore, there is no cohesive overview provided at the beginning or end of the report that effectively summarises the main trends. While the pie chart figures are generally reported correctly, the overall task completion suffers from misinterpretation and lack of a clear summary. This places the response in Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at structuring an introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding discussion. However, the logical progression is hindered by awkward transitions and confusing referencing. For instance, the transition 'Lastly, types of dance classes according to number of students...' is abrupt and grammatically disjointed. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes inaccurately used, such as 'Whereas the types of dance classes is showns by...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within the final paragraph is weak due to tangled sentence structures. Overall, the organization displays some structural awareness but lacks clear overall progression, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors in word choice and morphology. Examples include 'adult people' (contradicting the visual data), 'involving in the dance', 'loaction', 'studies' instead of 'studios', and 'battet'. While the student attempts some less common terms like 'percentage', 'category', and 'illustraed', inaccuracies impede precision. Spelling errors such as 'showns', 'loaction', 'trent', and 'battet' occur frequently. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, resulting in a Band 5.0 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a limited range of structures, with frequent grammatical and punctuation errors. The student attempts complex sentences, but these are often faulty, such as 'The graphs which are shown provide detail on the location and kinds of dance classes adult people in a town in Australia are currently attending.' Subject-verb agreement issues are common, including 'The pie chart show', 'types of dance classes is showns', and 'community halls and other have'. There are also fragmented or incomplete thoughts, such as 'In which the two categories also show for under 11 white bar and from 11-16 years black bar is used.' These persistent errors cause frequent strain for the reader, placing the grammar at Band 5.0.
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