Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The charts provide information on the location and genres of dance classes young individuals in Australia are recently participating.
Overall, private studios are account for the largest area of the town, while college-based studios are account for the smallest. In addition, the maximum number of students of under 11 age group is in the ballet dance, while in the modern dance, they appear the minimum. In contrast, The 11 years to 16 years age group appears the maximum number in modern dance, while they show their minimum number in ballet dance. However, tap dance depicts almost same participants regardless all age groups.
Private studios are account for 48% area, the largest, and college-based studios are account for 10%, the smallest among total area of the location of dance classes. Additionally, school halls are account for 24%, and community halls and others are account for 18% of total.
According to the age groups, under 11 years old group appears the maximum number, 600 in ballet dance class, and the minimum number, 300 in modern dance class. On the other hand, the age group between 11 years to 16 years appears the maximum number, approximately 520 in modern dance class, and the minimum number, 300 in ballet dance class. However, the two age groups are evident as almost same numbers of students in tap dance class, where under 11 age group appears around 450 participants, and 11 years to 16 years age group appears around 420 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both charts, including the location breakdown and the dance classes by age group. The overview correctly identifies private studios as the largest location and college-based studios as the smallest. Key data points are accurately cited, such as private studios at 48% and the 600 students attending ballet in the under 11 category. Comparisons between age groups and dance genres are also well-made. The response meets all requirements for Task Achievement at a Band 6.5 to 7 level, as all parts are addressed with clear data reporting, though the overall summary could be slightly more integrated.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organised into clear paragraphs, starting with an introductory paraphrase, followed by an overall summary, and then separate paragraphs detailing location data and age-group data. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'In addition', 'In contrast', 'Additionally', and 'On the other hand'. However, referencing and transitions are sometimes a bit mechanical, and paragraphing could flow more smoothly. Overall progression is clear, meeting the criteria for a solid Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'proportion', 'genres', 'participants', and 'age group'. However, there are frequent word-formation and collocation errors, most notably the recurring grammatical misuse of the verb 'to be' with active verbs (e.g., 'private studios are account for' instead of 'account for'). Other lexical choices are somewhat repetitive, keeping the lexical score at a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. The most prominent and repeated error is the incorrect passive construction involving the verb 'to be' combined with active verbs, such as 'private studios are account for', 'college-based studios are account for', and 'under 11 years old group appears'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently and lower the overall grammatical accuracy to a Band 5.5.
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