Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
THE PROVIDED PIE CAHRT ILLEUSTRATES THE INFORMATION OF THE LOCATION OF DANCE CLASSES AND BAR GRAPH DEPICTS THE TYPES OF DANCE IN A TOWN IN AUSTRALIA
OVERALL, PRIVATE STUDIOS HAVE THE MAXIMUM PERCANTAGE . HOWEVER, COLLEGE BASED STUDIOS HAVE THE MINIUM RATION .
IT IS CRYSTAL CLEAR THAT, 10 PERCENT OF YOUNG STUDENTS DO DANCE IN COLLEGE BASED STUDIOS IN AUSTRLIA. WHILE , 8 PERCENT MORE INTRESTED ADULTS DANCE IN COMMUNTY HALL AND OTHERS.MOREOVER, SCHOOL HALLS (AFTER SCHOOL} AND PRIVAT STUDIOS HAVE 24 % AND 48% STUDENTS WHO ATTEND DANCE CLASSES RECPECTIVELY.
BY CONTRAST, 600 NUMBER OF STUDENTS AGE OF 11-16 DO THE BALLET , BUT ONLY 300 STUDENTS UNDER 11 DO THE SAME DANCE .IN ADDITION, AGE OF 11-16 STUDENT INTREST IN TAP AND MODERN DANCE WITH 420 AND 510 NUMBERS, HOWEVERR, ONLY 300 STUDENT JOIN MODERN DANCE CLASSES UNDER 11. MEANWHILE, 450 PIPILS ARE IN TAP DANCE CLASSES AGE FROM 11-16.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover both charts, identifying the pie chart's breakdown of dance class locations and the bar graph's illustration of dance types by age group. However, there are significant data interpretation errors, particularly in the bar graph section where the age groups are confused. For instance, the student states that 600 students aged 11-16 do ballet, whereas the chart shows that 600 students under 11 study ballet, and 300 are in the 11-16 age group. The overview is overly simplistic, written in all-caps, and contains minor inaccuracies regarding percentages (e.g., stating adults instead of young people). While the main features are acknowledged, the inaccuracies in data reporting prevent this from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is structured into short paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, paragraphing conventions are poorly handled, with the entire text written in uppercase letters. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'BY CONTRAST' and 'MEANWHILE', which fail to establish clear logical progression between the contrasting age groups in the bar chart. Referencing is also occasionally confusing, and the overall mechanical presentation significantly hinders smooth reading and logical flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling errors ('CAHRT', 'ILLEUSTRATES', 'PERCANTAGE', 'MINIUM', 'RATION', 'AUSTRLIA', 'INTRESTED', 'COMMUNTY', 'PRIVAT', 'RECPECTIVELY', 'INTREST', 'HOWEVERR', 'PIPUILS'). The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to the charts ('pie chart', 'bar graph', 'percentage'), but the constant misspellings and limited range of less common lexical items restrict the score. Word choice is occasionally unnatural, such as 'minimum ration' instead of 'lowest proportion' or 'minimum percentage'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text relies heavily on simple sentences and basic structures, with frequent grammatical and punctuation errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and preposition use, such as 'young students do dance in college based studios' instead of 'take dance classes'. Punctuation is haphazard, featuring extra spaces, missing periods, and incorrect commas. Complex structures are attempted but are generally faulty or awkwardly phrased, such as 'while, 8 percent more intrested adults dance in communty hall and others'. Errors are frequent and often distract the reader.
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