Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The following charts illustrate the data which comprise the locations and types of dance sessions which young aged individuals are taking in a town of Australia.
Overall, pie chart accounted for the largest share of private studios while college-based studios experienced the smallest proportion.In bar chart Ballet experienced the highest numbers of dance classes students and the Modern dance learners remained the least in all types.
To begin with, the location of dance classes, the pie chart consist the largest proportion of private studios which is 48% aproximately the half in total comapared with all buildings. School halls stand with 24% while Community halls & other category decreased dramatically 18%. College-based studios significantly declined the most in all about 10%.
On the other hand , In Bar chart the types of dance classes ( by different age group) saw a significant decline under the age of 11 like, Bellet, Tap and Modern all types of dance classes saw a decline respectively from 600 students to 300 students respectively. While over the age of 11 upto 16 experienced remained low in comparison to under 11 but gradually rose from 300 students in Bellet to 500 students in Modern dance classes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the visual data by summarising the location of dance classes and the types of dance classes by age group. However, there are notable inaccuracies in data interpretation and reporting. For instance, the student states that the types of dance classes 'saw a significant decline under the age of 11... respectively from 600 students to 300 students', which misreads the chart where Ballet, Tap, and Modern are distinct categories with different values rather than a single trend of decline. Additionally, phrasing like 'pie chart accounted for the largest share of private studios' is confused. The overview is weak and lacks precision, identifying visual components rather than overarching trends. Consequently, the task achievement is limited by these interpretive errors, placing it at a Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into distinct paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for each chart. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing sentence structures, such as 'To begin with, the location of dance classes, the pie chart consist the largest proportion'. Cohesive devices are mechanically used or misused, and referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'Community halls & other category decreased dramatically 18%'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires better control to achieve a higher band. The overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, but logical links between ideas are faulty at times, supporting a Band 5.5 score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but contains noticeable inaccuracies and unnatural word choices. Examples include 'young aged individuals', 'pie chart accounted for the largest share of private studios', and repeated misspellings or awkward terms like 'Bellet'. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary such as 'proportion', 'significantly', and 'gradually', but collocational errors and incorrect word forms ('comapared', 'aproximately') detract from the quality. The lexical range is limited and frequently repetitive, meaning it meets the requirements for a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex sentences are faulty and difficult to parse. Frequent grammatical errors include missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms, and punctuation issues, such as 'In bar chart Ballet experienced the highest numbers of dance classes students and the Modern dance learners remained the least in all types.' Run-on sentences and awkward phrasing impede communication in several places. While there is a basic control of simple structures, the frequency of errors in complex attempts prevents the writing from reaching Band 6.0, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0.
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