Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This charts illustrates the information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in a Australia are currently attending .

There is a different groups of youngs peoples which include most private studios where people most used about 48%.

on the other hand if we see towards types of dance classes by different age group under the age of 11 to 16 years old .Modern type of dance mostly like by 500 students .

while ,school halls after school used by students 24% for dance and ,Tap dance is the second most favourite choice by 400 students .

Furthermore,community halls and other 18% used for dancing pratice and the other choice of dance is , Ballet which is liked by 300 students is on the third number .

overall,college based studios which is the least choice of students about 10%.Which is young people and students not like .So there ratio slightly less other then types .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The student attempts to address both parts of the task by mentioning the location of dance classes and the types of dance classes across different age groups. However, the data reporting is fragmented, disorganized, and contains inaccuracies. For instance, the text states that 'Modern type of dance mostly like by 500 students', which conflates age groups, as the chart shows 520 students for 11-16 and 300 for under 11. Key overviews are poorly handled, with the concluding summary ('So there ratio slightly less other then types') being largely incomprehensible. While some main features are touched upon, the lack of a clear, coherent overview and inaccurate referencing of data place this response at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe organizational and cohesive issues. Although basic transition markers like 'Furthermore' and 'overall' are used, the logical progression is disrupted by chaotic sequencing that jumps back and forth between locations and dance types without a clear structure. Paragraphing is extremely poor, consisting of disconnected, broken sentences rather than cohesive topical units. Referencing is also faulty and confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The student uses a very basic and repetitive vocabulary range, with frequent word choice and collocation errors (e.g., 'youngs peoples', 'mostly like', 'dancing pratice', 'least choice'). Words are often misused grammatically or semantically, such as 'ratio slightly less other then types'. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the general topic of dance classes, the high frequency of errors and the lack of less common lexical items restrict the score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly constructed sentence patterns that frequently break down. There are constant errors in basic syntax, punctuation, and article usage (e.g., 'This charts illustrates', 'There is a different groups', 'while ,school halls after school used by students 24% for dance and'). Sentence boundaries are frequently blurred by comma splices and dangling modifiers, and complex structures are almost entirely absent or faultily constructed. This demonstrates control characteristic of Band 4.0.

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