Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of different locations of dance classes and the bar chart provides information on types of dance classes by age group in a town in Australia.
Overall, Private studios account for largest proportion than other locations. Modern dance has a higher number of children, while ballet accounts for a higher number of teenagers.
Nowadays, Private studios comprise largest loaction of dance classes which is 48%, School halls account for the second largest place about 24%. Community halls and others make up 18%. College-based students covers the smallest proportion which is roughly 10%.
In modern era, there are three types of dance which include: Modern, Tap, Ballet. Children under 11 are most interested in Ballet dance. There are almost 600 students; They have least interest in Modern dance there are only 300 children. Modern dance has more than 500 children aged 11-16. These children are less interested in ballet. In contrast, Tap dance style is liked by every age group, it has 400 teenagers and almost 450 adult students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of both the pie chart and the bar chart. An overview is provided, noting that private studios are the most popular location and highlighting age-related trends in dance styles. Data is appropriately cited, such as 'Private studios comprise largest loaction of dance classes which is 48%'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and misinterpretations in the data reporting, such as describing 'College-based students' (studios) and stating that tap dance has 'almost 450 adult students' when the chart categorizes groups by age ('Under 11' and '11-16'). Despite these minor flaws, the key information is adequately selected and compared, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to each chart. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall,' 'Nowadays,' and 'In contrast,' though some referencing is slightly awkward or mechanical. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to separate distinct ideas, such as splitting the analysis of locations and dance types. While the overall arrangement is coherent, referencing errors (such as referring to 'College-based students' instead of 'studios') and repetitive transitional phrasing prevent the text from achieving a higher band. Overall, the organization is clear enough to follow without difficulty, corresponding to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'proportion,' 'comprise,' 'minority,' and 'contrast.' However, there are several lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as spelling 'loaction' instead of 'location,' using 'College-based students' instead of 'studios,' and misapplying the word 'adult' in reference to the 11-16 age group. Less common vocabulary is attempted with occasional inaccuracy. Spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable but do not impede overall communication, placing this response firmly in the Band 6.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'The pie chart illustrates the proportion of different locations...' and 'Children under 11 are most interested in Ballet dance.' There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips throughout the text, including run-on sentences ('There are almost 600 students; They have least interest...') and missing articles (e.g., 'account for largest proportion'). However, these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear. The grammatical control is representative of Band 6.0.
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