Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart depict a proportion of dance classes and their location. The bar chart illustrates a verities of dance classes which is allocated according to the age group.
Overall, the majority of dance class has location of privet classes. Bar graph has high number of under age group student in ballet dance and the lowest number in also ballet.
To begin with, private studios has covered almost half part of location which is 48%. Moreover, 24% school halls also conduct a dance classes after school. The community halls and other also acquire 18%. Lastly, college based studios has 10%of location and also they run run a dance class at that place.
On the other side, first and foremost they have two parts and first is under 11 and other is 11-16. To begin with, ballet dance has the highest number of students and the is 600 by the contrast age between 11-16 has only 300 students. Furthermore, tap has almost similar numbers and that is near by 400. Lastly, modern dance has high number upper age group people and the student is approximately 500. However, also 300 students who are under 11 has also 300 students.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover both charts, reporting features from the pie chart (such as private studios at 48%) and the bar chart (such as ballet having 600 students under 11). However, the overview is extremely weak and confused, containing contradictory statements such as 'the lowest number in also ballet.' Furthermore, there are several misreadings of the data, such as claiming that ballet under 11 has the highest number while 11-16 has only 300, but then confusing modern and ballet figures later. The reporting of data is sometimes inaccurate or poorly explained, placing the response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, separating the pie chart and bar chart analysis. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing phrasing and mechanical or repetitive cohesive devices, such as starting multiple sentences with 'To begin with.' Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it hard to follow the comparisons between age groups. Paragraphing is attempted, but overall cohesion is faulty, which aligns with the Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word choice errors that impede understanding (e.g., 'privet' for private, 'verities' for variety, 'college based'). There are attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary, but inaccurate collocations and incorrect forms ('upper age group people', 'contrast age') restrict the lexical range to a minimally adequate level, fitting Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak throughout. There are frequent errors in verb agreement, articles, and sentence structure (e.g., 'The pie chart depict', 'the student is approximately 500. However, also 300 students who are under 11 has also 300 students'). These frequent errors often cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from reaching Band 6.
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